Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The renderd, first , pie chart demonstates the main reason fr learning a foreign language wheres , other one depicts that how many teacjhers felt there has been change in the reason , and date in percentage .

in overall , a huge percentage of learning foreign language is Travel , but , in recent years buying prperties has a great contribution for learning .

In detail, a huge proportion of learrners love to learning foreign language because of travel , 1\3 people chose that

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the charts’ general subjects and give a relevant overview: travel is the leading main reason, while buying property overseas is the most frequently reported reason for a recent increase. However, the report is only minimally developed. It gives just one supporting figure—“1/3 people”—and does not describe the other categories or explain the second chart’s results. The phrase “in recent years buying properties has a great contribution” is also imprecise: the chart reports teachers’ views of recent increases, with buying property overseas at 34%, not its contribution to learning overall. The response is 85 words, so it does not meet the 150-word minimum. Add accurate comparisons and key figures from both charts, including the 26% for business/work and the 19% for buying property as a main reason.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the report into an introduction, an overview and a detail paragraph, and the reader can follow the broad contrast between travel and buying property. However, the progression stops before the data are properly presented: the final paragraph begins to discuss travel but ends without developing the point or moving to the second chart. Linking words such as “in overall” and “but” are used, yet punctuation around them is distracting and the relationship between ideas is not always clear. To improve, use complete paragraphs with a clear sequence: introduce both charts, summarise the main patterns, then compare the most important figures in each chart. Avoid leaving a sentence or paragraph unfinished.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “pie chart,” “main reason,” “percentage,” and “proportion,” and the key idea about travel is understandable. However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural phrases are frequent enough to limit clarity, for example “renderd,” “demonstates,” “learrners,” and “buying prperties.” “Love to learning” is not an appropriate collocation, while “has a great contribution” does not accurately express the chart’s reported increase. Aim for accurate, neutral report language and check spelling carefully. Useful alternatives include “students learn a language for travel,” “the largest share,” and “teachers reported an increase.” These choices would make the description more precise without requiring overly complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts several sentence forms, including a comparison introduced by “but,” and the opening sentence tries to describe both charts. However, grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “the other one depicts that how many teachers felt” has an incorrect clause structure; “a huge percentage of learning foreign language is Travel” lacks a natural grammatical construction; and “learners love to learning” uses the wrong verb pattern. Articles and plural forms are also missing or unclear in phrases such as “learning foreign language” and “1/3 people.” Punctuation is frequently misplaced, with spaces before commas and unnecessary commas interrupting clauses. Build accurate simple sentences first, then add comparisons using patterns such as “Travel was the most common reason, at 33%.”

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