Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the foreign student learn language for to the personal development and its percentage about 7 percent and also for social contacts and its percentage is about is 7 percent and for the genral interest and is percentage is about 5 percentage and also buying the property oversease and it percentage 109 percentage and also for business and work and percnetAGE is 26 percentage and 3 percent for partner and 33 percent oif travel and the in other section the teacher is felt recent change is 4 percent personal dvelopment and 15 percent for social contacts and 3 percent travel and 6 percnet for genral intrest and 34 percent for buying property overseas and 19 percent for business and work anf 15 percent for no change anf 4 percent for foriegn partner these things that change in recent and the teacher felt so these are the main reasons that people learning the language

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You include figures from both charts and identify several relevant reasons, such as travel (33%), business/work (26%), and buying property overseas (34%) in the recent-change chart. However, the report mainly lists data rather than describing the key patterns, and it gives no clear overview of the most and least common reasons or the contrast between the charts. One important figure is inaccurate: buying property overseas as the main reason is 19%, not “109 percentage.” The second chart is also described as a general “recent change,” although its figures report teachers’ views of increases and include “no change.” To improve, open with an accurate overview, then group and compare the most significant figures rather than presenting them as an unstructured list.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response does cover both charts, and the repeated use of “and also” and “in the other section” gives the reader some indication that you are moving between categories and charts. However, nearly all the information is packed into one long sentence, so the sequence is difficult to follow and comparisons are not clearly signposted. The ending, “so these are the main reasons,” repeats the topic without summarising the main findings. Organise the report into short paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and separate sections for the two charts. Use clear links such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile,” and group related figures so the reader can see the main patterns.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “personal development,” “social contacts,” “business and work,” and “buying property overseas,” so the reader can generally identify the categories being reported. However, the vocabulary is repetitive and several word choices or spellings reduce clarity, including “genral intrest,” “oversease,” and “these things that change in recent.” Phrases such as “the teacher is felt recent change” are also not natural ways to describe survey responses. Aim for precise reporting language, for example, “teachers reported” and “the most common reason.” Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating “percentage” after nearly every figure; varied, accurate phrasing will make the report clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect several pieces of information with “and,” and some individual data phrases are understandable, such as “33 percent of travel.” However, sentence structures are very limited, and the long run-on sentence makes relationships between ideas unclear. There are frequent problems with articles, agreement, and verb forms, as in “the foreign student learn language” and “the teacher is felt recent change.” The opening also lacks a clear grammatical frame for reporting the chart. Practise writing complete, controlled sentences such as “Travel was the most common reason, at 33%,” and “Teachers most often reported an increase in learning for buying property overseas.” Use full stops to separate comparisons.

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