Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

It is often argued that the some people most important thing in life, little interest and other think about their hobbies and leisure interests in jobs. This eassy will discuss both prepective before expain why i belive that important thing in life and little interest that is preferable.

To begin with, One of the main reasons is that the most important thing in life and little interest, it is prefer for human life. However, people get try to lot of thing for their life, but they do not get it. Therefore, people get lot of interest in their life, but they do not get it. Because, lot of things and lot of interest people confused what is they put in their life, but in the end of day they do not get in interest and things in their life.

Furthermore, Anothere important reason is that some people think that about their hobbies and interest in jobs. As a result, they earned every thing, but they have a lot of pressure in their life. However, they handle and care for family this is the important for human life. In contrast, they focused on their hobbies and jobs, in the end of day they get successful of their life.

In conclusions, although there are different opinions regarding this issuse, i belive that both topic is important of our life, but i prefer most important thing in life and have little interest. Because, this is important for people,and people do not get a lot opf thing and lot of interest.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response attempts to discuss both attitudes and gives a preference, but the ideas are difficult to identify and are not developed with relevant explanations or examples. The opening says it will explain why one attitude is preferable, yet the conclusion says both are important and then favours having little interest, so the position is unclear. The body paragraphs do not clearly explain why some people prioritise work or why others value leisure; claims such as people “get successful” are not supported. The response is also 2 words below the 250-word minimum; the 9 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To improve, state a consistent opinion and explain each attitude with a specific reason and example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic essay shape, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusions” show an attempt to organise the response. However, the ideas within paragraphs do not progress clearly: the first body paragraph repeats that people have interests but “do not get it,” without clarifying what this means. Connectors including “Therefore,” “Because” and “However” sometimes introduce relationships that are unclear or contradictory. The conclusion also shifts the position rather than resolving the discussion. For clearer progression, give each paragraph one distinct purpose, develop its main point in a logical sequence, and use linking words only when their relationship is accurate.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “hobbies,” “leisure interests,” “pressure,” “family” and “successful,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow, such as “the most important thing in life and little interest” and “they do not get in interest.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “eassy,” “prepective,” “Anothere” and “issuse.” Build a more precise topic vocabulary and check spelling; for example, distinguish “prioritise career” from “value leisure time,” rather than repeating “interest” and “things.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a mixture of simple sentences and longer clauses, using forms such as “although” and “because,” but control is inconsistent and many sentences are difficult to interpret. For example, “One of the main reasons is that the most important thing in life and little interest, it is prefer for human life” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “people get try to lot of thing” has problems with verb construction and number. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “One” and “Anothere” after commas and the lower-case “i.” Practise forming clear subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; check articles, agreement, verb forms and sentence boundaries during revision.

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