Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some persons value their work as the most important thing in life and have little concern in anything else.Other people are most energetic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their job. Both these perspectives differs in various aspects.

Individuals give value to their work more because they think it will be going to benefit them more than other things. For example , if person is more focused on his goals then will be able to bulid a better career in his life. He also believes that spending time in various outdoor activities will be the wastage of his precious time which he can utilize for his working because he has a strong belief that work is the factor through which he can be busy and do not bother by environmental stresses.

On the other hand, most people love to spend their time focusing on their skills and enjoy spending time with other whether they are their families, friends or any close relative. For instance, if one person only focus on his creative skills rather than stressing about work he will be able to groom himself in better ways like painting, calligraphy and much more. In this way he will be able to communicate about different problems occuring in his life with his close ones. Also ghe will be more physically fit than the one who is always busy at his workplace.

So, according to me only working for day and night will not going to benefit an individual as compared to those who enjoy their lives parallel to their jobs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You discuss both attitudes and give a clear, if brief, opinion: you explain that work-focused people seek career benefits, while those who prioritise leisure can develop creative skills and spend time with loved ones. However, the ideas are limited and need fuller explanation. For example, the claim that work keeps people from being bothered by “environmental stresses” is unclear, and the benefits of hobbies are asserted rather than supported with a specific example or evidence. Your conclusion states that work should not dominate life, but this position could be developed more explicitly. The response is 242 words, so it is 8 words below the 250-word minimum; the 19 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Add relevant development rather than padding to meet the requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each attitude, and a concluding opinion. “On the other hand” clearly signals the shift to the second perspective, and “So” introduces the conclusion. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several claims are joined without showing their relationship. For instance, the first body paragraph moves from career goals to outdoor activities and then to environmental stress without a clear connecting explanation. Some references are also unclear, such as “he” and “one person,” which make the discussion feel less precise. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it with a connected example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “career,” “creative skills,” “physically fit,” and “leisure interests.” There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “precious time” and “environmental stresses.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are noticeably inaccurate, which can make meaning less clear. For example, “most energetic about” does not naturally express enthusiasm, and “give value to their work” is an awkward way to describe prioritising a job. Spelling errors such as “bulid” and “occuring” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise range of collocations for discussing work-life balance, and check spelling during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “if one person only focus on his creative skills…” and clauses beginning with “because.” This shows an effort to express reasons and consequences. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make the reader pause. Examples include “Both these perspectives differs,” “if person is more focused… then will be able,” and “only working for day and night will not going to benefit.” These show problems with subject–verb agreement, missing subjects or articles, and verb forms. Punctuation also needs attention, particularly the missing space after “else.” Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb, especially in conditional and future constructions.

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