Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

According to the recent circumstances all over the world mostly people have more concious about their jobs and their children future.Everyone want a suitable and well paying job.Realting this,its is often argue that few number of people believe that job is more important in their life and they also said sometime may spend their time in hobbies and intrests.While other often said that hobbies and leisure intrests is more benefited and has more advantages.In this essay i will discuss both of points and give my own opinion.

On the first hand, the people believe that job is more dominent activety and some time we can spend their time in other kind of activeties.Its numerous advantages in this regard.Firstly, a regular job is very helpful for the people to getting good pay and also help them to manage their home budget.Moreover, they also fulfill their children wishes and support them financially.In addtion, its also help them to more serious about their life and setting their rountine in their early life,By doing this they also recieve good attention in the society and people want to relate with this kind of persons.

On the second hand, spend their most time in their hobbies and interests. its also beneficial for the people.firsly, its very helpful for the people to feel more energetic and confident.when the spend their time in thier intresets they feel very happy,moreover they more feel good feelings and the stress level also calm down.In addtion,spend time this kind activeties also a chance for them to the spend time their time with family and children.moreover, when they spend a good period of time with their family they feel more happiness and their children also learn good manners spending time with their fathers.

Therefore, by viewing the both of points i strongly believe that job is more important part of the people life.Although, both have benefits in this regard but i prefer to job.

In conclusion,both has beneficial for the people life.Job is helpful to support thepeople financially and also grow up their social relation.In contrast, spending time free and leisure activity is a chance to spend time with family.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both attitudes and state a clear preference for work, especially in “I strongly believe that job is more important.” Relevant reasons include financial support, managing a household budget, and the benefits of hobbies for energy, confidence, stress relief, and family time. This covers the task, but the two positions are not explored equally: the work paragraph gives several related benefits, while the leisure paragraph relies mainly on general claims and does not explain why someone might prioritise hobbies over employment. The opening also shifts toward jobs and children’s futures rather than directly framing the contrast in the question. Develop each attitude with a specific example and explain the trade-offs behind your opinion to make the discussion more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two attitudes, your opinion, and a conclusion. This makes the overall line of discussion easy to identify. You also use signposts such as “On the first hand,” “On the second hand,” and “In conclusion.” However, these transitions are sometimes mechanical, and the relationship between ideas is not always clear. For example, the claim that a job brings “good attention in the society” is added without showing how it follows from the preceding points. The opinion paragraph and conclusion also repeat the same preference rather than advancing it. Use clearer links between reasons and examples, and make references such as “both” or “this kind” more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “well paying job,” “financially,” “stress level,” “hobbies,” and “leisure activity,” so the reader can follow the main ideas. There are also attempts to express more specific concepts, such as “manage their home budget” and “setting their routine.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors are noticeable: “concious,” “domin ent,” “intrests,” and “more benefited” are examples. Repeated use of “helpful,” “people,” and “spend time” also makes the writing less precise. Build a bank of accurate topic collocations and check spelling and word forms; this will make your arguments clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including sentences linked with “Moreover,” “Although,” and “when,” and the main message is generally understandable. However, control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent. For example, “Everyone want” needs subject–verb agreement, while “it is often argue” has an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “On the second hand, spend their most time…” lacks a clear subject, and “both has beneficial” has an agreement and structure problem. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also unreliable, with several run-on sentences and missing spaces after full stops. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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