Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people regard work as the most important thing in their life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Majority of the people prioritize their work in their lives and drops the level of their interest in other skills. But on the other hand, their are some masses who prioritze their hobbies and show their interests in leisure time.

To begin with, people who priortize their work and does'nt give any time to their hobbies and other interested activites tend to be more serious and depressive persons. As they drastically focus on their work and professional life leading to more problems in form of mental stress and seriousness, making their life miserable. They tend to have a mindset of having a successful carrer and even thought to gather wealth for their later ages but this type of thinking just leads to mental stress and illness resulting in loss of their interests.

However, people who are enthusiasts about their passion and hobbies are more likely to live fullfilled life. These people tends to be joyfull ones who sees life from a completely different lens. These individulas also focuses on their professional lives although they even do their professional work with less stress and anxiety. They to want a settled and comfortable lives in their older age but with the work they do not supresss their desires of opting some hobbies of their interest. They tend to live them like a freesoul.

In conclusion, among both the aspects people with enthusiasm for their interests are tend to live better life in comparison to the individuals who just prefer to do work only.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response discusses both attitudes and gives a clear preference for people who maintain hobbies, especially in the conclusion. It also offers relevant consequences: work-centred people may experience stress, while those with hobbies may enjoy a more fulfilling life. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The claims that work-focused people become “serious and depressive” and that hobby-oriented people “live better” are broad, with little explanation or a specific example to support them. The first attitude is also presented mainly negatively, rather than exploring why someone might value work, such as purpose, achievement, or financial security. Develop both perspectives more evenly and support each with a concrete example or explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each attitude, and a conclusion that restates your view. Transitions such as “To begin with,” “However,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. The progression within paragraphs is less secure, however: several ideas about stress, wealth, ageing, and interests are placed together without clearly showing how one leads to the next. The opening also repeats the task wording before moving to a general statement, and “But on the other hand” is an awkward, redundant transition. Use clearer links between cause and result, and make each paragraph develop one central point in a more deliberate sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “mental stress,” “professional lives,” “hobbies,” and “anxiety,” and you attempt more expressive phrases such as “a completely different lens.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main contrast. However, word choice and spelling are often inaccurate or unnatural, as in “other skills” for interests, “masses” for people, “fullfilled life,” and “freesoul.” Several phrases also repeat general terms such as “tend to” and “interests,” limiting precision. Choose common, accurate collocations before attempting unusual expressions, and check spelling carefully. For example, “people who prioritise their careers” and “a fulfilling life” would express your ideas more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons and results, for example, “As they drastically focus on their work … leading to more problems.” However, control of sentence structure is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “Majority … drops,” “people who … does’nt,” and “These people tends,” where subject–verb agreement is incorrect. The sentence beginning “As they drastically focus” is a fragment, while “They to want” has an incorrect verb construction. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and punctuation. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns first, then connect clauses with clear conjunctions; proofread each sentence for a complete main clause.

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