Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

work life and hobbies and leisure interested the both side are very uniq. this is a uniq person persnality.so some peple thing about that regard work as the improtant thing in life and have a littal interest in anything else. and other side peple thinks about that enuthuaiatic abput their hobbies and leisure interests then their jobs. i am party agree with this given statement.

firstly, we can talk about a work life. so this life are very uniq. they enrn money a lott and financial stability with all life. this is the things that the person drem. and day by day carrer growth another level. and family are very happy to seen some febules growth. and all of achieve future goals and become a independent. for example, The mukesh ambani are bussnes man and they use there brian so right now he is a femous bussnies man in the country.

secondly, we can talk about a life of hobbies, leisure interests. this is the one kind of reduce stress. improve mental helth becuse work a lott and over all overthinking. spend time with a family and littal stress with all of things. learn new skills, meet new people, antrege veard person. that type of many things but you enjoy you life more. beause donig by yours and yous hobbie.for the example, arjit sing are very fomus singar. and is rockstar beacue his work big tuff improvment.

conclusion, the both side are very uniq and very hard the person belive both side so this is the best things they ever achivred boy the most improtant is gives time and patience.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both attitudes by discussing work-focused people and those who value hobbies, and you give a personal view with “i am party agree.” The work paragraph offers relevant points about income, financial stability, career growth and independence; the hobbies paragraph mentions stress reduction, mental health and learning skills. However, the position is not clear or consistent: the conclusion says both sides are important without explaining which attitude you support or how you partly agree. Several points remain under-developed, and the examples of Mukesh Ambani and Arijit Singh are named but not clearly connected to the argument. State your opinion precisely in the introduction and conclusion, then explain each main point with a clear cause, consequence or specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two attitudes, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. Sequencing words such as “firstly,” “secondly” and “for example” also signal the intended progression. However, ideas within paragraphs often appear as disconnected fragments, such as “they earn money a lot” followed by “and day by day career growth another level.” Some linking phrases are repetitive or do not show the relationship between ideas clearly, and the conclusion does not follow through on the stated partial agreement. Build each paragraph around one central claim, connect supporting sentences with clear cause-and-effect links, and use pronouns and transitions only when their references are clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “financial stability,” “career growth,” “reduce stress” and “mental health,” which helps communicate the main themes. However, the range is limited and many spelling, word-form and collocation errors make parts difficult to understand, for example “uniq,” “enuthuaiatic,” “femous bussnies man” and “antrege veard person.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “work life are very uniq” and “enrn money a lott.” These issues sometimes strain the reader’s effort to interpret your meaning. Learn accurate topic vocabulary in short phrases, check spelling carefully, and prioritise natural combinations such as “earn a good income,” “pursue leisure activities” and “achieve career goals.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response uses basic sequencing structures to organise its points. However, grammatical control is weak: errors occur frequently in sentence formation, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation. For example, “this life are very uniq” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “family are very happy to seen” uses an incorrect verb pattern. Several ideas are written as fragments, including “and day by day carrer growth another level,” and the opening sentence is difficult to parse. These errors can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise complete subject–verb sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time, checking agreement and verb forms.

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