Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays,the imporatnce of hobbies are tremendously increasing as people are adopting in their lifestyles. Some people belive that work should be the topmost priopority of the people in their life as they must ignore anything else. While, other think that people have greater feeling of joy when they are giving their leisure time in hobbies and other interest as compared to their jobs.

Work is the significant part of our life. Those, who stress on to work hard, belive that working is the only way to get a successful and wealthy lifestyle. Through work, people can try to make himself in order to achive all his ambitions. For inatance, if a person is doing all his work, he will get paid, but if he goes up to his hours limit, he will be paid beyond its actual salary. In this way, people represent their thinking that a person should put all his focus to his work, regardless of the other things which have less importance in his life.

While, some think that a person should be allowed to do whatever he wants to do, in his free time, in order to make himself cool and happy. Through investing his leisure time in hobbies and other sort of interest, a person develops self calmness and become more enthusiastic. It realses a hormone, called as dopamine, which helps the person to be more active and also helps the person to cut out all his stress and makes himself for th new hectic day. For instance, a person, after working 9 am to 5 pm, must need some rest and a hobby which helps him to prepare himself for the next day challenges by removing the tierdness of the whole day.

By summarizing all the above discussion, I conclude by giving my opinion that there must be some time for a person which helps him to get rid out the fatigue of whole and makes the person to get some pleasure.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You discuss both attitudes: the work-focused view is linked to earning money and achieving ambitions, while hobbies are presented as a source of enjoyment, calmness and relief from stress. Your final paragraph also indicates that you favour making time for leisure. These points are relevant, but the opinion is only stated clearly at the end, and the discussion of work is more general than developed. The example about extra pay does not fully explain why work should take priority over other parts of life, while the leisure example is more specific. To strengthen the response, state your position in the introduction and develop each side with a clear explanation and a well-chosen example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each attitude, and a conclusion. This makes the main progression easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “For instance,” “While,” and “By summarizing” to signal examples and stages of the argument. However, some transitions feel mechanical or are used awkwardly, particularly the opening “While” at the start of a paragraph and “By summarizing all the above discussion.” The conclusion repeats the idea of leisure relieving fatigue rather than bringing the two views together. Some references, such as “it” in the discussion of dopamine, are not fully clear. Use more natural transitions and make each paragraph’s central point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “ambitions,” “leisure time,” “self calmness,” “enthusiastic,” and “fatigue.” This helps communicate the contrast between work and hobbies. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, as in “imporatnce,” “belive,” “priopority,” and “tierdness,” and several combinations are unnatural: “greater feeling of joy,” “investing his leisure time,” and “cut out all his stress.” These choices sometimes make the meaning less precise, even though the general message remains understandable. Focus on accurate spelling and natural collocations, such as “derive enjoyment from hobbies,” “spend free time on a hobby,” and “relieve stress.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer, complex sentences, including conditional forms such as “if a person is doing all his work, he will get paid” and relative clauses such as “a hobby which helps him.” This shows some range, and the main ideas can generally be understood. However, errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence construction recur. For example, “the importance of hobbies are” should use a singular verb, and “a person develops self calmness and become” has inconsistent agreement. The sentence beginning “For instance, if a person…” also has an unclear conditional structure. Practise checking subject–verb agreement and building complex sentences around one clear main clause; this will improve accuracy without sacrificing variety.

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