Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people assume that work is the most important thing in their life and these people show little interest in other things or in their hobbies while other people believe that personal interests and leisures activities are more valueable and effective than proffesional responsibilities and work. Work is the most important in life. Work gives you ways to success as hardworking is the only key for success in your life.

If we talk about work is the most important thing in life neverthless people need money to spend their best lifestyle and it also need to meet their daily expenses therefore for sake of best lifestyle you need money and for money you need to do work. For example when you work hard you have successful career it will provide you better lifestyle. Doctor,Teachers and engineers work hard to support their families and they also achieve professional goals. Therefore work gives you financial independence and also a confidence.

Other people who shows more interest in hobbies ratherthan work. Hobbies are also necessery for happiness and for healthy lifestyles. Hobbies help people to feel relax when they are in depression or any other trauma so these leisure activities help them mently healthy. Most of aged people spent their most of time in their garden and gardening is their favourite activity, different people have different hobbies and they show interest in their hobbies to reduce their work-related stress. Playing sports, reading books and travelling can refresh people's mind.

In a conclusion, Both work and leisure activities are important. However, maintainig a balance between professional responsibilties and personal interets is best way to achieve a successful and satisfying life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both attitudes and give a clear overall view: work provides financial independence and career achievement, while hobbies support happiness and reduce stress; your conclusion recommends balance. These points are relevant and the examples of doctors, teachers, engineers, gardening, sport, reading and travel help illustrate them. However, the discussion is uneven: the work paragraph mainly explains the need to earn money, while the hobbies paragraph lists benefits without exploring when leisure might take priority or how it compares with work. The opening also states “Work is the most important in life,” which sounds more absolute than your balanced conclusion. To strengthen the response, explain your position consistently and develop each side with a specific example and a clearer comparison.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two attitudes, and a concluding opinion. This makes the overall line of discussion easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “For example,” “Therefore,” and “However” to signal examples and conclusions. At times, though, connections feel mechanical or unclear. The opening repeats “work is the most important” before the first body paragraph develops that point, and the long sentence beginning “If we talk about work…” contains several ideas joined without clear boundaries. Some references, such as “these leisure activities,” are understandable but could be more precise. Use clearer topic sentences and divide chains of related points into shorter sentences to make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for the topic, including “financial independence,” “professional goals,” “work-related stress,” and “leisure activities.” These phrases help communicate the main ideas, and the reader can generally understand your meaning. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “valueable,” “proffesional,” “necessery,” and “mentely.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “ways to success,” “best lifestyle,” and “more valueable and effective.” These issues limit the accuracy and flexibility of your vocabulary. Build a bank of natural collocations for work and leisure, check spelling carefully, and choose words that express your intended comparison precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses with “while,” “when,” and “so,” and most of your ideas remain understandable. There are, however, some recurring grammatical problems that reduce accuracy. For example, “If we talk about work is the most important thing” has an incomplete structure, while “it also need to meet their daily expenses” has unclear subject–verb agreement and reference. In “Other people who shows more interest,” the verb does not agree with the plural subject, and “Both work and leisure activities are important” is a more accurate pattern than some of the less controlled constructions elsewhere. Review sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, and verb forms, then proofread each sentence for a complete subject and verb.

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