Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

some people think that the most important thing in life is wrork and have less interest in anything else while other acknowlegde about their hobbies and free time activites rather than their jobs

In ny opinion we cannot rely on one thing and can cannot leave both things first of all we shall know that how to manage both things in our daily life routine because If we ask that we dont do the work everytime we focus on hobbies do fun enjoy everytime thats not good because Its life we cant survive without work If we dont do the work how will get money how we will succeed in our life what we tell to the coming generation that we just wasted time on our hobbies and leisure acitvites because If you earn money do some Jobs with job you learn alot of things we go further in life and achieve goals step by step beside that If we talk about the leisure acitvites and hobbies that also important because Its good for your healthy lifestyle you enjoy to make your mind fresh its your responsibility to concentrate on you body like gym football etc thats build your confidence you look good so both things are good we just know how to manage the time and do that on the time then we will dont have the issue on work or leisure activites hobbies etc its very important to give time to your family when you are in leisure time

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a relevant overall view: work is necessary for income and progress, while hobbies support health, confidence and family life. This addresses both attitudes and offers a personal position that people should balance them. However, the discussion is only partial: the work-focused attitude is mainly presented as a hypothetical warning about not working, rather than explaining why some people make work central to their lives. The benefits of leisure are also listed but not developed with a specific example or evidence. Your position becomes clearer in “both things are good,” but it would be stronger if stated directly at the beginning and maintained consistently. Explain each attitude in its own developed point, then support your preference for balance with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic line of thought: you introduce the two views, argue that work is necessary, then discuss the value of hobbies and conclude that both need time. Some linking expressions, including “first of all,” “because,” “beside that” and “so,” show attempts to connect ideas. However, nearly the entire response is one long paragraph, with little clear progression between the two attitudes and your opinion. The repeated use of “because” and “If” makes the reasoning feel like a chain of loosely connected points, and references such as “that” are not always clear. Use separate paragraphs for the work-focused view, the leisure-focused view and your conclusion, and make each paragraph develop one main idea in a clear sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “work,” “hobbies,” “leisure activities,” “earn money,” “achieve goals” and “healthy lifestyle.” This gives the response a relevant basic range. However, vocabulary is often repetitive or imprecise, and several spelling errors make the writing less clear, such as “wrork,” “acknowlegde,” “activites” and “acitvites.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “concentrate on you body” and “do some Jobs.” Aim for more accurate collocations and a wider range of expressions for discussing motivation and wellbeing. Proofreading spelling and choosing precise phrases will make your ideas easier to follow without changing their meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to express reasons and conditions using structures such as “If we don’t do the work, how will we get money?” and “when you are in leisure time.” These show an effort to go beyond short, simple statements. However, the range remains limited, and complex sentences are often faulty or run together. For example, “we can cannot leave both things” contains conflicting verb forms, while “how will get money” lacks a subject. There are also frequent problems with sentence boundaries, capitalization and punctuation, especially where several ideas are joined without full stops. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly formed subordinate clause, then check verb forms and punctuation.

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