Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Recently, there has been a concern over what humans regards to be of interest to them the most. While some people sees work as the most significant thing in their life, others maintain that their hobby and free time interest them the most. This essay intends to discuss both perspectives before reaching a personal opinion about the matter.
On the one hand, in support of those who sees work as the most important thing in life, I think it is because they derived more satisfaction in accomplishing set goals. This can been experienced in a situation where individuals has already set goals for themselves that is meant to be achieve between a particular time range, at that period work will be the only thing that matters to them any other thing are of less important. For instance, the rich man in the world which is Elon Musk does not find interest in play or relaxation, but intend working day and night to see that he hits his target. Therefore, I believe that regarding ones work has been very important has helped a lot of people achieve their goals.
On the other hand, people find great deal of interest from their hobbies and leisure, because they feel that the body needs to rest properly so it would not break-down, there is this popular saying that all work and no play make jack a dull man. For example, this is usually seen among most government workers in Nigeria, they perfer their leisure time and hobbies than their work that is why even in their 70s they look very young and healthy.However, I think that seeing leisure time and hobby as being important has enhanced the healthy of employees
To sum up, while regarding work as important has helped to achieve goals, and seeing relaxation and hobbies as the most significant has helped in enhancing the health of workers, I strongly believe that they should be a balance between the two options as it is very vital for the total well-being of the people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both attitudes towards work and leisure and providing a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. The ideas are relevant, such as the mention of goal-oriented individuals like Elon Musk and the health benefits of leisure. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the example of government workers in Nigeria is a bit anecdotal and could be better linked to the broader argument about work-life balance. The position is clear throughout, but the essay would benefit from more nuanced exploration of why these attitudes exist to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'To sum up', which help guide the reader through the argument. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are instances where the flow between sentences could be smoother. For example, the transition between the discussion of work and the example of Elon Musk is a bit abrupt. Referencing is generally clear, but the overall progression of ideas could be more sophisticated to achieve a higher score.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their ideas clearly. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'satisfaction', 'accomplishing', and 'significant'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'regarding ones work has been very important' instead of 'prioritizing work', and 'enhanced the healthy' instead of 'enhanced the health'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and collocations to reach the next band level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the writer attempts complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some people sees', 'others maintains', 'individuals has') and verb tense consistency (e.g., 'can been experienced'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences and missing commas. These errors are noticeable and occur throughout the text, though they rarely prevent the reader from understanding the intended meaning. Improving control over basic grammatical rules and sentence construction is essential for progress.
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