Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
to bigin with , some people only having interest in jobs in life and no interest or less interest in anything . compare than other people are more enthusiastic about their hobby and less interest in their work .
work is important for life ,in additional the person who loves work they are hardworking or very straight forword person . they spent their entire life for only jobs no hobbies and no interest in fun .
on other hand , person who have crazy about fun and hobby , and less interest in work they spent their life with minimum of budget and they have no money for spent for enthusiastic creativity . it is very difficulty for them . if they having no interest in jobs or work so happens family problem occurs and they are not satisfied with their income .
in my opinion , work is most important for life and hobby are important for mental health .
in conclusion , the work is life line for human beings and enthusiastic about temporart
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 176 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both attitudes and provides an opinion, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. The ideas are presented in a very simplistic manner, and the conclusion is incomplete, failing to fully synthesize the arguments. To improve, you must expand on your points with specific examples and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for a full discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay uses basic paragraphing, but the logical progression of ideas is often disjointed. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the awkward transition 'in additional' and the repetitive use of 'and'. The relationship between sentences is often unclear, making the text difficult to follow at times. To improve, you should use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'however') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'work', 'fun', and 'hobby'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'crazy about fun' and 'life line for human beings'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas or nuanced arguments. To achieve a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific collocations and synonyms to avoid repetition and improve the precision of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors in sentence structure, verb tense, and article usage, such as 'some people only having interest' and 'if they having no interest'. The essay relies almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and there is a lack of complex grammatical forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several errors in comma placement. To improve, you should practice constructing complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions and focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage.
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