Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, people have different opinions about the importance of work and leisure activities in their lives. While some people consider their jobs to be the most important part of their lives, others give more importance to their hobbies and free-time activities. This essay will discuss both views and present my own opinion.
I believe that the importance of work and leisure activities in their lives but some time i believe that the consider their jobs to be the most importance to their hobbies and free time activities.i most like to the consider their jobs to be the most importance to their hobbies and free time activities because other activities is very important of the life. Example: the work is very hard and loads so that time people is very sad and tiredness so that time they join the family and enjoying free time.
One the one hand,The first point is people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else so many people like to the work and they have not interest hobbies and free time activities because they love to work and enjoying in the work. The People can achieve their career goals because same people is very focus our life so that why they have not interest in hobbies. They feel proud and satisfied when they succeed. some people believe that work should be the most important part of their lives because it provides financial security and personal satisfaction.
In conclusion, although work is important for financial security and success, I believe that hobbies and leisure activities are also essential for a happy and balanced life. Therefore, people should maintain a healthy balance between their work and personal interests.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the prompt and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. The second paragraph is repetitive and lacks clarity, making it difficult to follow the argument. While the essay touches on the importance of financial security and personal satisfaction, the supporting evidence is underdeveloped and lacks depth. The ideas are presented in a somewhat circular manner, which prevents a full exploration of the topic. To improve, you should focus on expanding your arguments with specific, logical examples rather than repeating the same points in different ways.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by confusing sentence structures and poor transitions. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'In conclusion' and 'On the one hand', they are often applied incorrectly or in a mechanical way. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between sentences is disjointed. The second paragraph, in particular, lacks a clear focus, which makes it hard for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a single, clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently reuse basic words like 'important', 'work', and 'activities' without demonstrating a range of synonyms or more sophisticated collocations. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'other activities is very important of the life', which hinder the precision of your expression. To reach a higher band, you need to incorporate a wider variety of topic-specific vocabulary and demonstrate better control over word forms and collocations. Focus on learning synonyms for common words and practicing how to use them in context to avoid repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'other activities is'), sentence fragments, and incorrect word order. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are often faulty, leading to confusion. For example, the sentence 'I believe that the importance of work and leisure activities in their lives but some time i believe that the consider their jobs...' is structurally incoherent. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and improving your grasp of punctuation before attempting more complex structures.
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