Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Most people believe that work is the key to success in the life and have little intrest in other things. However other people are more enthusistic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs. In my opinion job is most important ting in life. I will articulate my ideas in my upcoming paragraph.
First and foremost, nowadays work is everything in human life so we have to earn money for our parents and for our better future. Because if we do not have money in this time then no one will give importance to you that you deserve. By doing work we can easily feed ourself and parents. For instance, if we work hard we can easily complete our dream and can proudly life in the society. Secondly by working hard we can achieve everyting in the life nothing is impossible. If we work we can easily success in the life and any of the work is not small its just the way you thing. To demonstrate, in India there is a actor named Rajni kanth he is a bus conducter in thids teenage and now he is one of the most popular actor.
on the flip side, hobbies are also important in human life because if you are able to achieve you passion then you can easily became popular star among people. All people must have to try to achieve their hobbies because by it you will be happy in your life. For example, nowadays sports is the most loved hobby in the world all the big names are in sports because they focus on their hobbies instead of doing work.
In conclusion, I believe that work is more important in life by doing work we can be able to achieve our goal and we can easily success in our life. However following your hobbies is also a good decision because in this genration most people like to complete their hobbies
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the prompt and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. The argument for work being the most important aspect is supported by a personal example, but the explanation lacks depth and relies on generalizations. The discussion of hobbies is also brief and lacks a strong connection to the prompt's requirement to discuss the 'enthusiasm' people feel for them. While the task is addressed, the arguments could be more thoroughly extended and supported with more sophisticated reasoning to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. There is a basic attempt at using cohesive devices such as 'First and foremost', 'Secondly', 'On the flip side', and 'In conclusion'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive. The progression of ideas within paragraphs is occasionally disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition between the importance of money and the example of the actor is abrupt. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall flow could be improved with more varied and sophisticated linking words.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'intrest', 'enthusistic', 'ting', 'everyting', 'thids', and 'genration'. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on common words like 'important', 'work', and 'life'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the frequent spelling mistakes hinder the overall quality. To improve, you should focus on using more varied synonyms and ensuring accurate spelling of common academic terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'in the life', 'feed ourself', 'proudly life', and 'can easily success'. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable and affect the fluency of the writing. A greater focus on sentence construction, verb forms, and proofreading for basic grammatical slips would significantly improve the score.
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