Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the debate regarding interests in job presents two contrasting perspectives. while some argue that relating profashionals as the more essential in life along with that having least interest in anyothers. others aggressively claim regards their passion and enjoyable interests compare to their work. although both sides offers valid arguments. my inclination would be in prior views. which is explain with valid points and appropriate examples.
on the one hand, supporters of the first view argue that daily job
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly under the required 250-word minimum, containing only 78 words. Because the essay is incomplete, it fails to address the prompt fully. The introduction presents the topic and a position, but the body paragraphs are not developed, and the essay ends abruptly after only one sentence of the first body paragraph. Consequently, the task is not addressed in a meaningful way, and the arguments are not supported or extended as required by the task instructions. This results in a very low score for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text shows an attempt at logical organization by using transition phrases like 'on the one hand' and 'while some argue'. However, because the essay is incomplete, there is no overall progression of ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, but the second paragraph is cut off immediately. Cohesive devices are used in a somewhat mechanical way, and the lack of content makes it impossible to evaluate the flow of arguments or the effectiveness of paragraphing beyond the initial structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'profashionals' instead of 'professionals' and 'anyothers' instead of 'anything else'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequent errors and the lack of a sufficient word count prevent the demonstration of a wider range of lexical items.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The writing contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with sentence structure, such as 'which is explain with valid points' (should be 'which will be explained') and 'both sides offers' (subject-verb agreement error). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. The errors are frequent and sometimes impede the clarity of the intended message, reflecting a limited control over basic grammatical rules.
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