Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
It is often claimed by people that some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. this essay will compare and contrast along with the viewpoint will be elucidated subsequently.
Initiating with the viewpoint to elaborate, the stances, the first school of thought. primarily many people more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs a survey was conducted by the ministry of united kingdom which is 72.3% of masses deem that the above statement is true due to the given reason.
On the contrary who hold the people another to say that some people is most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else they believe that nowadays masses and well aware of it. because of the changes society development research. A scientist a renowed a named has takashi kalaves which is professor of Bristol university has confirmed opinion in his recent research
to conclude my viewpoint I had firmly like to opinion the other people uses their hobbies and liesure interest than their jobs. however it depend on minded people that are in favor of.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both viewpoints, the arguments are severely underdeveloped and lack logical depth. The introduction is repetitive, and the body paragraphs fail to provide meaningful analysis or relevant examples. The 'survey' mentioned is vague and lacks context, and the reference to a specific professor is poorly integrated and unclear. Because the response is 59 words short and lacks sufficient expansion on the prompt's requirements, it does not fully address the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical flow. Paragraphing is present but the internal structure of the paragraphs is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'Initiating with the viewpoint to elaborate' and 'On the contrary who hold the people another'. These phrases do not effectively link ideas or guide the reader through the argument. The transition between the introduction, body, and conclusion is abrupt, and the lack of clear topic sentences makes it difficult to follow the writer's progression of thought.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. Phrases like '72.3% of masses' and 'renowed a named has takashi kalaves' demonstrate a lack of control over word choice and collocation. There is significant repetition of basic vocabulary, and the essay relies on awkward phrasing that obscures the intended meaning. The student struggles to express complex ideas due to a restricted range of vocabulary, and there are frequent errors in word formation and usage that impede the reader's understanding of the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort meaning. Sentence structures are largely simple or poorly constructed, such as 'this essay will compare and contrast along with the viewpoint will be elucidated subsequently.' There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'some people is most important thing,' and incorrect use of articles and prepositions. Complex sentence attempts are largely unsuccessful and contain significant errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters and misplaced commas, making the text difficult to read.
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