Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Society is divided into altruistic and egocentric mind-sets of people. Although some masses hold the viewpoint that some people regard work as the major thing in life and have some interest in something else. While other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs because of some people think that work is most important in life and some give more importance to their hobbies, I believe that later statement holds more importance.
On the one hand the main reasons why some masses favor the former statement is because many people consider work to be the most important thing in the life. This is due to fact that a good job provides fulfill their basic needs such as paying for accommodating and daily needs. For instance a survey conducted by social department has provided concrete evidence by highlighting 40% of people give more importance to become successful in their life. As a result, for some people , their career is an essential part of theitr identity and happiness
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 172 words. This significantly impacts the development of the response. While you attempt to address both sides of the argument and state an opinion, the ideas are underdeveloped and lack sufficient depth. The introduction is repetitive and confusing, and the body paragraph is incomplete, failing to provide a balanced discussion or a conclusion. To improve, you must expand your arguments with more detailed examples and ensure you address all parts of the prompt fully, including a clear conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks a clear structure due to its incomplete nature. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the logical progression is hindered by the lack of a conclusion and the abrupt ending. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the one hand' and 'For instance', but the overall flow is disjointed. The introduction is particularly problematic, as the sentences are repetitive and do not clearly set up the essay's direction. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would help improve the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on repetitive phrasing, such as 'important thing in life' and 'some people'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'accommodating' instead of 'accommodation' and 'social department' which is vague. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary and avoid repeating the same words within short distances. Expanding your range of synonyms will make your writing more engaging and professional.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains several grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as the run-on sentence in the introduction and incorrect verb forms like 'provides fulfill'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement. Proofreading for minor errors like 'theitr' (their) and ensuring correct preposition usage will significantly improve the accuracy of your work.
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