Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In early years of life, every one want to pursue his or her hobbies but when same person gets married or grow old then he have to quit his or her interests in their hobbies.

Those who have important in his life for work, those people who are serious about there life and typically in our old generation these types of people lived that type of life style be serious in her job life and not any signel seconds to enjoy or pursue their own hobbies.

Those people who are worked class They want to earn more money, they want to leave an impact in their life, and they want that our child can do all the same things which we are doing right now.

These kinds are people who in their childhood can not play any sports and even not read a book or even they didn't go for travel. Some chances that there parents were strict. And it make a huge impact on their life.

Second group of people those people who enjoyed their childhood with friends and playing with friends, while read books further they also went for any trip to abroad or read many books.

That's the main reason when they become adults they I don't find the job as a main work for them and they want to pursue their hobbies.

But from hobbies we can earn too.

Like me, my passion is travelling and from this hobby I am earning money. I go to any country and then their I record video and I uploaded it on YouTube and I earn good amount of money. I follow both for be successful.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both attitudes mentioned in the prompt and provides a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. The arguments regarding why people prioritize work or hobbies are somewhat superficial and lack clear, logical expansion. For instance, the transition between the two groups is abrupt, and the personal example provided in the final paragraph, while relevant, is not fully integrated into a cohesive argument about the balance between work and leisure. To improve, you should aim to provide more nuanced reasons for these attitudes and ensure your personal opinion is clearly stated and supported throughout the essay rather than just at the end.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure of these paragraphs is weak. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, making the flow of ideas disjointed. Cohesive devices are used very sparingly and often incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'Those people' or 'These kinds are people' to start sentences. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the relationship between ideas is not always explicitly stated. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic that is developed logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and often repetitive, which limits your ability to express complex ideas precisely. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'worked class' instead of 'working class' and 'signel seconds' instead of 'single seconds'. Some phrases are awkward, such as 'lived that type of life style be serious in her job life'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of variety and the persistent errors in word formation and usage prevent the response from achieving a higher score. You should focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede the reader's understanding. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'every one want', 'he have to'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, and there is a lack of complex sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and apostrophes. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the correct use of tenses before attempting more complex structures.

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