Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

People in the world prefer work and jobs over the hobbies or little interest in anything else .

Some people do not have leisure time to do hobbies and other have time do hobbies because they think that it is important for the healthy mind and sound body lessen the pressure of work . However, lower class public not have a plenty of money and they work all over time . In my opinion the facts about the anything else a hobby plays a vital role in our life to keep save mental disorders in contrast, other people not perform any activity they suffer from problems and feel like burden on it . My hobby that watching technology video which help me cope with problems in my leisure time do my personal interest work that give me satisfication

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 138 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the prompt asks to discuss both attitudes and provide an opinion, the discussion is extremely superficial and lacks the necessary depth, examples, or evidence to support the arguments. The ideas are presented in a fragmented manner, and the position is not clearly articulated or sustained throughout the text. Due to the severe under-length and the lack of development of the required task components, the response falls into the lower band range.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no paragraphing, which makes the progression of ideas difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the awkward transition 'In my opinion the facts about the anything else'. The relationship between sentences is often unclear, and the lack of logical sequencing makes the overall argument difficult to track. The response does not demonstrate the ability to organize information coherently, which is a requirement for higher bands.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'lower class public' and 'feel like burden on it' are unnatural and demonstrate a lack of control over word choice and collocation. There is significant repetition of basic words, and the student struggles to express complex ideas due to a restricted range of vocabulary. The errors in word formation and usage frequently impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'other have time'), article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'My hobby that watching technology video which help me'). These errors are pervasive and often distort the meaning of the sentences. The lack of complex structures and the high frequency of basic grammatical mistakes indicate a low level of control over English syntax.

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