Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
As statement shows that people think work is important in life and you have to build interest in other kind of things.on the other side they said you should have intrest in extra curicullar activities rather than your job and daily routines.
in my opnion life is not much hard we can make it easy and tough by showing our intrest.You have to intrest in your job and routines which is most important thing in life.you can work hard for your sucess in life.work is important for living life but on the other hand if you are intrested in other physical activities like sports which is healthy for your body and mind.As well known a sound body has a sound mind.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 121 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is severely limited. While the prompt asks to discuss both attitudes and provide an opinion, the response is too brief to adequately explore these perspectives. The arguments are superficial and lack the necessary supporting evidence or examples required for an academic essay. The position is stated but not developed, and the essay ends abruptly without a proper conclusion. To improve, you must expand on each viewpoint with specific examples and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for a full discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction or conclusion, and the ideas are presented in a single, underdeveloped paragraph. Cohesive devices are largely absent, making the flow of ideas disjointed. For example, the transition 'on the other side' is used, but the connection between sentences is weak. The lack of paragraphing makes it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. To improve, you should organize your essay into clear paragraphs: an introduction, two body paragraphs (one for each viewpoint), and a conclusion, using linking words like 'furthermore', 'conversely', and 'consequently' to connect your ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express complex ideas. There are several spelling errors, such as 'intrest' (interest), 'curicullar' (curricular), 'opnion' (opinion), and 'sucess' (success). The range of vocabulary is insufficient for an academic task, relying on simple words like 'hard', 'easy', and 'important'. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items and collocations. Focus on accurate spelling and using more precise academic terminology to convey your arguments effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as 'As statement shows that people think...', which is missing an article. Subject-verb agreement and verb forms are also problematic, for example, 'You have to intrest in your job' should be 'You have to be interested in your job'. Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and commas. The range of sentence structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. You need to practice using a variety of complex sentence structures and ensure your basic grammar, such as articles and verb forms, is accurate.
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