Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In these statments two type of people are described which have completely different mindset the one which is very obbesed with his work and have no interest in other activity and the seconde one is that people which are mercy with thier hobbies,health,intrestinism,and they take time for thier tasks rather than doing job.

In my opanion the persons which is engaged with thier duty are not social and have a very limited friened circle and very dificult to come out from his comfort zone and his life is so boring beacuse the weekly routine followed from the last joining from his job and they can't gave time to his health,famaily,friends so thats why these type of human have very limited boundries and if we talk about the seconde type of character these are very lovely with thier engagments and take time for it and thats why theier physical,mental healths are very healthy and they have a lot of experience of manners,talking,dealing,and people loved them.

If someone know my suggestion i will definitely like the persone who take time for self growth because it is very neccesary for good life and also if we look to succesfull people they have also a disipliend schedule in which they gave proper time for each and every activity.

If we take example of Cristino Ronaldo which is a fotball famous player in 2026 i saw in his routine doing excercise, swimming, sunbath and many more activities and like this player much more example of these personlity in thus aera.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt by discussing people who are obsessed with work and those who prioritise hobbies, and the student provides a personal opinion. However, the ideas are under-developed and limited in scope. For instance, the discussion on work-obsessed individuals relies on broad generalisations without sufficient supporting evidence. The attempt to use an example involving Cristiano Ronaldo is somewhat tangential and poorly integrated. The position is stated, but the overall development remains weak, aligning best with the Band 5 descriptors where ideas are limited and partially developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is divided into four paragraphs, which shows an awareness of structural conventions. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor sentence boundary punctuation, run-on sentences, and a lack of clear cohesive devices. For example, the second paragraph consists of a single massive, convoluted sentence that links multiple unrelated thoughts together with commas instead of full stops or appropriate conjunctions. Paragraphing is attempted, but referencing and transitions are inadequate and sometimes confusing, reflecting the characteristics of a Band 4 performance.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and heavily restricted, containing numerous spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally impede understanding. Words like 'obbesed', 'seconde', 'opanion', 'friened', 'neccesary', and 'fotball' demonstrate severe spelling weaknesses. Furthermore, unusual coinages such as 'intrestinism' and 'mercy with thier hobbies' show a very limited grasp of appropriate collocation and lexical range. While the student attempts to express complex ideas, the frequent errors place this firmly at Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text is plagued by run-on sentences, missing punctuation, severe subject-verb agreement errors ('the persons which is engaged', 'healths are very healthy'), and incorrect pronoun usage. There is an almost complete absence of accurate complex structures; attempts at subordination and relative clauses consistently result in ungrammatical formations. Errors are dense and frequent, often distorting meaning, which matches the descriptor for Band 4 where errors dominate and severely strain the reader.

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