Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
There are some kind of people. Some find peace in their work while others in thier hobbies.
Today I will be discussing both topics.
First of all there are kind of people who found peace in work. It can be anything. They are sophisticated people their work is there identity. It gave them exposure, meaning to live a life for a certain goal or dream. They They are convinced that without work there is no life no respect no true value. Their work become their moral. They considered their hobbies waste os time. People like them dont give there family a proper time. Because they are so committed to their work that leaving it will endanger their idnetity
Now second type of people who are enthusiastic. Who live for their freedom, their hobbies, their favourite things. They dont anything to do with life. They dont have certain goal. They are like who knows the future live today. If you live today then you will see the future
In my opinion i more of enthusiastic. I love playing football. It is my hobby my passion and i want follow it
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 250 words, containing only 189 words. As a direct consequence, the ideas are severely underdeveloped. While the student attempts to address both attitudes towards work and hobbies and briefly states a personal opinion ("i more of enthusiastic"), the arguments lack sufficient elaboration, supporting evidence, and depth. Phrases like "They dont anything to do with life" and repetitive generalizations without concrete examples prevent the task from being fully addressed. Consequently, the score for this criterion is significantly limited by the lack of development and under-length nature of the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organization of the essay is heavily fragmented. Paragraphing is weak and fails to follow standard essay conventions, with single-sentence paragraphs and abrupt transitions such as "Now second type of people who are enthusiastic." Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, making it difficult to follow a clear logical progression throughout the text. Referencing is also confusing in places, such as "They are like who knows the future live today." Overall, the arrangement of information lacks cohesion and adequate paragraph structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student relies on simple words like "peace," "work," and "hobbies" throughout the text. There are numerous word choice and spelling errors, such as "thier," "idnetity," and "waste os time." Attempts to use less common vocabulary are either inaccurate or awkward, such as calling work a person's "moral." The limited range and frequent lexical errors strain the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and frequently broken sentence structures. There are numerous foundational errors, including missing verbs ("They dont anything to do with life"), incorrect pronoun usage ("i more of enthusiastic"), and punctuation slips. Sentences are often incomplete or fragmented, which impedes clear communication. Complex structures are largely absent, and the high frequency of errors places this response firmly in the lower band range.
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