Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
A few people regerd when they do not get their jobs in there own fileld, and other people have job in their own filed which they have interest in it. In next pargraph i will dscuss in the both the views
Firstly, the people do there jobs which they do not study, becsuse there is no good salary according there field they have study in it,which causes failing in there career.As a result they do not pay there daily basic cost,there sre msny diagreement in the family, and they do not get the enough money they are expecting,they do bad things in there work and get bad responses.In Pakistan htere is no proper jobs of the people who has done graduation or study in the specific field, they have to do jobs to survive in the country.
Secondly, If people do there favourite jobs and follows their hobbies, certainly they get happy in their life, For instance they get hand full of money and they do there work with proper manners, family get happy, they can afford their daily basis cost,It helps them to grew in there future, that is why people go abroad to get the jobs on there on feild which they learn about it
I n the last, i like to conclude that, if they person getting a handful of money on the job which is not related to them, they do that, but if they are want to follow their hobby, so they join that field that they have most interest in it.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both viewpoints regarding work and hobbies, and offers a personal opinion at the end. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive. For instance, the discussion on people doing jobs outside their field focuses heavily on salary issues and family disagreements without sufficient elaboration or concrete academic evidence. The introduction is brief and contains irrelevant opening remarks regarding job placement. While all parts of the task are touched upon, the arguments remain somewhat superficial and under-developed, placing this response at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression is hindered by poor paragraphing conventions and repetitive transitions such as 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' and 'In the last, i like to conclude that.' Referencing is frequently unclear, with ambiguous pronouns like 'they' and 'them' making it difficult to follow who is being referred to. Cohesive devices are used mechanically rather than flexibly, resulting in choppy transitions between sentences. This level of organization and cohesion aligns with Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive throughout the essay. The student uses basic terms such as 'jobs,' 'money,' 'happy,' and 'field' excessively. There are numerous severe spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'regerd' instead of 'regard,' 'fileld' or 'feild' instead of 'field,' and 'hand full' instead of 'handful.' These lexical inaccuracies and persistent spelling mistakes cause noticeable strain for the reader, fitting the descriptors for Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student attempts some complex structures, but they are frequently faulty and fraught with grammatical errors. Examples include 'the people do there jobs which they do not study,' 'according there field they have study in it,' and 'if they are want to follow their hobby.' Punctuation and capitalization are also problematic, with spacing errors around commas and periods, and a lowercase 'i' used for the pronoun 'I'. Simple sentences dominate, and grammatical errors occur in almost every sentence, significantly impeding communication and placing this response at Band 4.0.
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