Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, it is very common that most of the people regard their work work as the most important part in their life and there are also some individuals who are more interested in their hobbies rather than there work. In my opinion i completely agree with the individuals who takes their wrok as most important thing in there life.
On the one hand, there are the people who took their wrok as most important part because that work will bring them the money to the end of the month which can help him or her to pay for the rent, groceries, fees or other essential things in their life. For example, there is a father who is working as a mechanic in his work place so most of time he will spend more time doing additional work for more salary so he can easily fulfill his duty as father and husband both.
However, there are also some people who took their hobbies more efficently and it also have some benefits as, the person will be more fit as compare to any other office person, his or her mind will work more efficiently and quickly because of their stamina and some time most of people get their jobs regarding their hobbies which can make them to do their work more properly. For example, a man who has a hobbie in swimming so if he or she do it in every morning so he stamina and mind will work more efficently.
In conclusion, however, there are alot of benefits regarding taking there hobbies more seriously but in my opinion i completely believe the people who took thie work as the most important part because of the financial responsibilities they had on them.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both attitudes towards work and leisure, and presents a clear personal position ('In my opinion i completely agree with the individuals who takes their wrok as most important thing'). The ideas are generally relevant, but the support tends to be repetitive and somewhat under-developed. For instance, the argument for work revolves largely around financial necessity ('bring them the money to the end of the month'), but it lacks deeper exploration or varied examples. The conclusion also directly contradicts itself by stating 'in conclusion, however, there are alot of benefits regarding taking there hobbies more seriously', which slightly weakens the clarity of the overall position. Overall, the task is addressed, placing it at a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay has a clear overall arrangement with an introduction, two body paragraphs representing opposing views, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used sufficiently. However, cohesion at the sentence level is frequently faulty or mechanical. There is an over-reliance on basic conjunctions and repetitive transitional phrases such as 'On the one hand, there are the people who...' and 'However, there are also some people who...'. Furthermore, pronoun referencing is occasionally unclear or confusing, as seen in sentences shifting awkwardly between singular and plural pronouns ('help him or her... fulfill his duty'). These issues indicate a Band 5.5 performance for cohesion and coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, touching upon everyday work and hobby-related concepts ('mechanic', 'groceries', 'swimming', 'financial responsibilities'). However, there are frequent spelling errors ('wrok', 'efficently', 'hobbie', 'alot') and awkward word choices ('took their wrok as most important part'). Less common lexical items are attempted but often misused, showing limited control over collocation and word formation. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, the recurring errors in spelling and word form restrict the lexical score to a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses and conditional-style constructions ('so he can easily fulfill his duty', 'so if he or she do it in every morning'). However, grammatical accuracy is weak throughout the text. There are frequent errors in verb tense, agreement, and prepositions (e.g., 'most of the people regard their work work', 'i completely agree', 'do it in every morning', 'responsibilities they had on them'). Capitalisation is also ignored at the start of sentences and with the pronoun 'i'. These persistent errors place the grammar score at a Band 5.0.
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