Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

These days, there is ongoing debate amoung people regarding job, work is good thing to stable the life. It is possible to claim that some people suggest work as the most importnat thing in life and little interest in anything else, while in contrast people who argue Other people are more serious about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs. In my opinion bothy pros and cons In this eassy I shall explain my point of view by analyzing in various prospective. One of the most frequently cited argument in favour of job is that job is creating of life Furthermore, the impact of paid positionextends beyond individual level, many people prefer jobs because which is all ready attach job affecting society as a whole. Moreover impact on human last but not at least. However it is also important to consider the potential pitfall associated with. To elostrate this point, a recent study conducted by the department of education in March 2022 and 2023 clearly indicates that academic have not only realise its gravity, put also gaugae thr magnitude of its relivent then its comes today ever changing life style. To conclude, I conside that jobs is integral part in development of society. I would strongly recommend that job and hobbies both have a good government should take steps many jobs offer in lower education person and make the ground young people playing criket and any hobbies easily.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, containing only 239 words, which results in a necessary penalty under Task Achievement. While the candidate attempts to discuss both attitudes towards work and leisure, the development of ideas is severely compromised by incomplete sentences, disjointed thoughts, and lack of clear argumentation. The writer states an opinion in the introduction, but the body paragraphs degenerate into fragmented, repetitive phrases and incoherent clauses that fail to properly explore the prompt. Key phrases like 'job is creating of life' or the generic study reference do not constitute substantive support or a well-developed discussion. Therefore, the response can only be credited at a low level for addressing the task minimally and unclearly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

Coherence and cohesion are major weak points in this essay. The text lacks logical organisation and progression throughout. While some transitional markers like 'However' and 'To conclude' are attempted, they are used incorrectly or attached to nonsensical clauses, such as 'However it is also important to consider the potential pitfall associated with' which trails off without completing the thought. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with the entire body of the essay compressed into a single, rambling block of text that fails to separate distinct ideas. Furthermore, referencing is frequently unclear, making it extremely difficult for the reader to follow any logical thread or relationship between sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The lexical resource displayed is extremely limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic words such as 'job', 'work', 'life', and 'people'. There are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'stable the life', 'amoung people', and 'criket'. Attempts at less common vocabulary result in awkward or unidiomatic phrases like 'gauge thr magnitude of its relivent'. Spelling errors are present, and vocabulary control is weak throughout, forcing the reader to guess intended meanings. Consequently, the lexical range does not exceed a basic level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range and accuracy are very poor. The response contains a high density of severe grammatical errors, including fragments, run-on sentences, missing verbs, and incorrect prepositions. Examples include 'people who argue Other people are more serious...', 'because which is all ready attach job affecting society', and 'jobs offer in lower education person'. Simple sentences are frequently malformed, and complex structures are attempted without any success, leading to frequent errors that severely impede communication and distort meaning. There is a complete lack of control over basic sentence construction.

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