Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this contemporary era, many people regard work as the most significant thing in the life and have little interest to something else.Others people are more passionate about their hobbies and the interest they have in a particular thing rather than their jobs.Both the perspectives and my opinion will be elucidated along with pertinent examples in the following pargraphs.

Out of all the reasons why some people give more importance to the jobs, the predominant one to state is to get better financial stability. To explain this, it can be elaborated that many individuals main goal is to get the jobs that gives good range of salary, they want this because they believe that the money is the most presious thing in their life and if they focus more on jobs they will get finacial backup and will be beneficial towards them in emergency situations like health, education, investment and so on.As a result, many people think that it is better to focus more on to get employed for money.

Nevertheless, others are more driven to their interest hobbies and so on because they love to do such things. To exemplify this perspectives, it can be elaborated that many people want to built their carrier on their interest and hobbies because they believe that it is important to enjoy the particular work they are going to do, and by putting hardwork, consistency, dedication and right path they will achieve everything. Therefore, they will go towards their interest and hobbies.

To recapitulate after analysing all the aforementioned ideas it can be inferred that many people regard work as the most important in the life because to get finacial stability, while others are more passionate to the leisure intrests and hobbies because they belive they love to do that think.I believe that it is more vital for person to do work on the basis of his hobbies and intrests.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both attitudes towards work versus leisure and provides a clear personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. Ideas are extended, particularly in the body paragraphs where financial stability and personal fulfilment are discussed. However, some arguments feel a bit repetitive and lack fully developed supporting evidence, remaining somewhat general rather than using deep examples. For instance, the discussion on financial needs touches on emergency situations, but it could be expanded with more precise context. Despite these minor limitations in depth, the writer successfully covers the core requirements of the task, meeting the criteria for a Band 6.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay displays a clear overall arrangement with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas. Cohesive devices are employed to connect sentences, such as 'To explain this', 'Nevertheless', and 'To recapitulate'. However, referencing and cohesion are sometimes faulty or mechanical, as seen in awkward transitions like 'To exemplify this perspectives, it can be elaborated that...' There are also minor punctuation and spacing errors that disrupt the flow (e.g., missing spaces after periods). Progression is generally clear, but the mechanical nature of the cohesive phrases places this firmly in the Band 6 category.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common words and phrases such as 'contemporary era', 'financial stability', and 'predominant'. However, there are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations throughout the text, such as 'little interest to something else', 'Others people', 'give more importance to the jobs', and 'leisure intrests'. Additionally, spelling errors like 'pargraphs', 'presious', 'finacial', 'built' (instead of build), 'carrier' (instead of career), and 'belive' occur regularly. While communication is not impeded, the frequency of word choice and spelling inaccuracies prevents the essay from reaching a higher band, making Band 6 appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over multi-clause sentences. Examples include 'To explain this, it can be elaborated that many individuals main goal is to get the jobs that gives good range of salary...' However, grammatical errors are frequent. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('the jobs that gives'), missing articles ('in the life', 'the money', 'right path'), incorrect prepositions ('interest to something else', 'passionate to'), and fragmented or run-on structures. Punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after full stops, are also present. These errors occasionally cause strain for the reader, placing the grammar performance at a Band 5.5.

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