Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Today, people disagree about what is most important in life. Some people focus completely on their jobs and careers. However, others care more about their hobbies and free time. In may opinion we need to work but can not ignore our hobbies.
Accordingb to the first school of thought, work is most valuable part of the life for our growth and success. To become part of this advanced society every person should need to work hard and constant. Those peoplr who have an intrest to become financialy well developed, he must giving his best to his work. Because it support the financial stability as in the modern era. For example, one of my freinds is working very hard and steadily in his struggles. As he wanted to become successful in this society and want to start his own business. By his constant hard work now he become a well known business in this modern era.
While on the other hand, hobbies are also an important part of our life. In free time most of the people spend their time in doing their favroite hobbies. Because after a long busy day these intrestd hobbies help us to loss our stress. These hobbies are also involved in the improvment of our mental health. These hobbies are become an important part of that person`s life, so whenever he is stressed he will definitly choose his favroite hobby to do. In my opinion, there should be the balanced routine in the work and free time hobbies to do.
In conclusion, work is the most importsnt part of our lives. While on the other side, there should be the hobbies to do in the free times. As these hobbies helps us to reduced our stress. So there should be balance between work time and hobbies time.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both attitudes regarding work and leisure, and provides a clear personal opinion in the introduction, body, and conclusion. Ideas are relevant, such as the discussion on career success and stress relief. However, the development is somewhat limited and relies on generalised or repetitive statements. For instance, the example of a friend is underdeveloped and contains vague claims. The conclusion also slightly contradicts itself by stating first that work is the most important part of life and then immediately calling for a balanced routine. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, fitting the Band 6 profile for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into four paragraphs, providing a logical overall structure with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. There are noticeable mechanical errors in linking phrases, such as 'Accordingb to the first school of thought', 'While on the other hand', and 'In conclusion, work is the most importsnt part of our lives. While on the other side'. Paragraphing is present, but referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly with pronoun agreement issues like 'Those peoplr who have an intrest to become financialy well developed, he must giving his best'. The logical progression is somewhat hindered by these repetitive cohesive flaws, placing the text firmly at Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to attempt the task, with words related to careers and hobbies like 'financial stability', 'advanced society', and 'stress relief'. However, there are numerous spelling and word-choice errors that occur throughout the text, including 'may opinion', 'Accordingb', 'peoplr', 'intrest', 'financialy', 'freinds', 'favroite', 'loss our stress', and 'importsnt'. These errors occasionally draw attention, though communication is generally not impeded. Less common items are attempted with some inaccuracy, which aligns with the Band 5 descriptors for lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical accuracy is weak. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and sentence structures. Examples include 'every person should need to work hard and constant', 'he must giving his best', 'now he become a well known business', 'these hobbies are become an important part', and 'these hobbies helps us to reduced our stress'. Many attempts at complex structures result in faulty grammar. Although the meaning remains understandable, the density of errors causes frequent difficulty for the reader, pointing to a Band 5 score.
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