Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In recent year, rapid growth of differents interest start argu. Saveral individuals blieve that public should take interest in those things wich related to their job as compare to anything else. On the other hand individuals assume that take a interest in other things whether it related to their profession or not , that will rise knowledge.

On the one hand people assume that there are no use of knowledge which is not related to their profassion and you can not use in work place. Also getting a information which is useable in work place is better than getting information which is not usable. As you can see also in real life. Several business hire those persin who has a huge knowledge in their sector.

On the other hand people consider that having a knowldge of other sector assist to employees see things widly and manage things more effecently . Also have a information of other sector , the worker can also make assimate that which things will creat a positive impact on their profassion. because of this many company would like those persions who has imformation of other sector as well.

Now a day company hair those persions who have knowlege or interest in other sector as well, So having information of many sector is beteer than having information in only work sector.

concusion, There is no end of this argu because several individual assume that have interset in their work interesd is better . However other individual believe that have a interest in other setor assist them see things clearly. Now a day the demand for those persion who have other sector knowledge increased amoung companys. so accoding to my perpective have a information will help you alto.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both perspectives—work-centered focus and leisure-focused lifestyles—and provides the writer's own opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited due to repetitive arguments and a lack of specific, concrete examples. For instance, the discussion on why companies hire people with varied interests remains generalised without elaboration. The position is clear throughout, but the superficial development and over-generalisation of points place this response securely at Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay attempts a logical organisation with clear paragraph breaks representing introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical, repetitive, or inaccurate, such as starting multiple paragraphs with 'On the other hand' or 'Now a day'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the progression of ideas falters because sentences lack smooth transitions. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs suffers from frequent structural disruptions. This matches the Band 5.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for discussing the prompt. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'differents', 'argu', 'Saveral', 'blieve', 'wicf', 'profassion', 'persin', 'widly', 'effecently', 'assimate', 'creat', 'hail', 'knowlege', 'concusion', 'interesd', 'amoung', and 'accoding'. These frequent lexical errors cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the score from reaching a higher band, placing the response at Band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are consistently faulty, characterised by missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and severe subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'rapid growth of differents interest start argu', 'individuals assume that take a interest', 'there are no use of knowledge'). Punctuation is also problematic. Because errors are extremely frequent and often obscure the intended meaning, the performance aligns with Band 4.0.

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