Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Nowadays, earning money is the most importent thing in the world. Many individuals argue that job and work as the very importent thinhg in there life while other people are more pesanet about ther hobbies. While there are some advantages to give priority to work I believe that work for hobbies are more important because they can devlop their porsnality, fell positive and easily mantain their work life balance.
On the one hand, one of the mejor reasion to focuase on work is that money. Many people want to earn more money. This is becxause they have to fullfil the need of their family. For example, some family have only one member that manage finince.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement, containing only 115 words instead of the required 250. Because of this severe restriction, the task is only partially addressed. The writer attempts to discuss both views regarding work and hobbies, and briefly states a personal opinion, but the ideas are severely under-developed and lack sufficient examples or supporting evidence. For instance, the mention of family finance is dropped quickly without full extension. According to the band descriptors, this falls under Band 4 due to the minimal and truncated nature of the response.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text demonstrates a basic attempt at paragraphing and structuring an essay, utilizing standard signposting phrases such as 'On the one hand'. However, the overall progression is limited by the extreme brevity of the response. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes misused or mechanical. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'that work for hobbies are more important'. While the basic logical framework of an introduction and one body paragraph is visible, the lack of a conclusion and the truncated argument structure restrict the score to Band 4.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The student uses a very limited and basic range of vocabulary with frequent, distracting spelling and word-choice errors that impede communication. Examples of severe spelling issues include 'importent', 'thinhg', 'there' (for their), 'pesanet' (for passionate), 'devlop', 'porsnality', 'fell', 'mantain', 'mejor', 'reasion', 'focuase', 'becxause', 'fullfil', and 'finince'. These frequent errors show a lack of control over basic orthography and lexical selection, aligning closely with the Band 4 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that contain frequent and severe errors. Examples of structural and agreement errors include 'job and work as the very importent thinhg in there life', 'advantages to give priority', 'work for hobbies are more important', and 'some family have only one member that manage finince'. These errors frequently strain meaning and demonstrate a lack of control over basic grammatical structures and subject-verb agreement, placing the response in Band 4.
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