Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Some people believe that work is the most important part of life, ehiles others think that hobbies and leisure activies than their jobs. this eassy will be discuss both view in upcomming paragraph.
On the one hand, work is an important part of life because it provides people with money and finacial security. a good job can given people a sense of activites such as playing games sports, listenig to music, travelling or spending time with family can help people relax and maintain a health lifestyle.
on the other hand, hobbies and leisure activities re also essential for a happy life working continuosly without taking enough breaks can make people tired and stress. In contrats , actuvities such as playing sports listening music can help to relex
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement, containing only 127 words compared to the required 250 words. Because of this severe under-length, the task is only partially addressed, and the ideas cannot be fully developed. While the writer attempts to introduce both sides of the argument regarding work versus leisure, the discussion is extremely truncated and cuts off abruptly. There is an attempt at a thesis statement in the introduction, such as 'this eassy will be discuss both view in upcomming paragraph', but the body paragraphs remain underdeveloped and fragmented. Consequently, this falls under the Band 4 descriptor for Task Achievement due to minimal task completion and lack of development.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The structural progression of the essay is severely disrupted by its incomplete state. Paragraphing is attempted, with an introductory sentence and the beginnings of body paragraphs, but the text is disjointed and ends mid-thought. Cohesive devices are minimal, featuring basic transitions like 'On the one hand' and 'on the other hand', but these are compromised by spelling mistakes ('In contrats'). The overall arrangement is not fully coherent because the ideas do not progress to a logical conclusion. This aligns with Band 4 descriptors, where information and ideas are not arranged cohesively enough to ensure smooth progression.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling errors that reflect a limited lexical range. Examples of weak or misspelled words include 'ehiles' (whilst/while), 'activies' (activities), 'eassy' (essay), 'upcomming' (upcoming), 'finacial' (financial), 'listenig' (listening), 'health' (healthy), 'contrats' (contrast), 'actuvities' (activities), and 'relex' (relax). While the student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like 'financial security' and 'leisure activities', the sheer frequency of lexical errors and the extremely basic nature of the vocabulary restrict the score to Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentence structures with frequent errors that occasionally impede understanding. There are notable issues with verb forms and agreements, such as 'this eassy will be discuss both view' and 'a good job can given people'. Punctuation and capitalization are also neglected, with sentences frequently starting without capital letters, as seen in 'on the other hand' and 'In contrats , actuvities'. Because the range of structures is narrow and grammatical errors are frequent throughout the short text, the performance corresponds to Band 4.
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