Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this concurrent years, people tend to do jobs and it is acutally important for them to do. There is widely belif that some people always do their job and not intersested in other things whilw on the opposite side individuals tend to do other activities than only job. We shall discuss both views of peoples in upcoming paragraph.
On one hand, The critcis who do jobs rather than any other acitivities are often seen that the have the burden of responsibilities so they tend to involve in this and lost interest on else things, In addition, they also have interest on other things like in hobbies, in talent and so on, but they do not have excess time for it.
On the other hand, The people who are higher interested in other activities than jobs are more independent than others, because they have stable income and they love to spend their money on themselves like on hobbies, talent and carrer. This people love themselves they enjoy their life rather than choosing rat life that only chase money from jobs.
Although from my perspective both are excellent in their point of view. However, in this i strongly agree with the people who are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and less interests in jobs because life is gained once it will not return so enjoy it.
In conclusion, The both individuals are perfectly accurate to their opinion one choose their carrer over hobbies , Whereas other individuals choose enthusiastic life over carrer
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both work-centric and hobby-centric attitudes, and clearly states the writer's personal opinion. However, the ideas are underdeveloped and lack specific examples or strong supporting evidence. For instance, the discussion of work-centric individuals mentions that they 'have the burden of responsibilities,' but this point is not elaborated with clear examples. Similarly, the conclusion reiterates the prompt rather than synthesizing the arguments. This places the response comfortably in Band 5.0, as it addresses the task and presents a position, but the development of ideas remains somewhat limited and repetitive.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is organized into five paragraphs, attempting a standard essay structure with an introduction, body paragraphs for each view, a personal opinion, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing phrasing, such as 'In this concurrent years' and 'The critcis who do jobs rather than any other acitivities.' Cohesive devices are often used inaccurately or mechanically (e.g., repeating 'On the other hand'). Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak, leading to a score of 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive throughout the essay, with frequent instances of inappropriate word choice and collocation, such as 'concurrent years' instead of 'recent years,' 'acutally,' 'belif,' and 'rat life' instead of 'rat race.' There are also noticeable spelling errors like 'acitivities,' 'carrer,' and 'intersested.' While the writer attempts some less common phrasing, the limited range and noticeable errors cause some difficulty for the reader, aligning with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('This people love themselves'), incorrect prepositions, and awkward sentence structures ('life is gained once it will not return'). Punctuation is also problematic in places. These errors occur frequently and occasionally impede communication, which reflects the Band 5.0 level for grammatical range and accuracy.
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