Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people believe that work is better than other things while some other believ that doing other activity is better than their jobs. I think doing job is good becaue it has a lots of advantage ike we can make more money but i also like some other activity which keep my body fit and healthy like walking i do these things in my free times.

Some people thoughs that doing work is better than doing other tyoe of activity like walking, exercise and music as well. When someone doing working which is needed it has alots of benifit like you will not face any finincinal issue in future as well as in present because they earing money intead of wasting their time. For instance doing job can provide much and more oppertuinty in life like earig money makin experience etc .Recently my friend dismised from their job because his was involve in other activity which produce some hrms to their job which is proven negative for their wealth now he is regreting it too much.

on the other hand, some people argue that doing other job has more benifits like farming, listening music or doi walking is best option. some people having interset of walking beacuse of they want keep their bood healthy and also want to refreshinh their mind. Foe example listening a musicb may keep you emotionally touch with you feeling whicg is good and have postive impact on health.

in conclusion, doing job is afr better than wasting your time in other activity because it has most advantages while spending time in just waste of activity may harm your future as well as present

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses both attitudes: the first body paragraph presents work as a source of income and opportunity, while the next mentions walking and music as ways to support health and emotional well-being. Your own view is also stated, particularly in the introduction and conclusion, where you favour work. However, the discussion is only partial and the position is not fully consistent: you say you like leisure activities, then conclude that work is “far better” and describe other activities as a waste of time. The examples, including your friend losing a job, are relevant but not clearly explained or connected to the broader issue. Develop each side with a specific reason and example, and clarify how you balance work with leisure.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two attitudes, and a conclusion. The phrases “on the other hand” and “in conclusion” help signal the direction of the response. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and some links between ideas are unclear. For example, the friend’s dismissal is introduced as evidence for prioritising work, but the connection between his other activity and the argument is difficult to follow. The second body paragraph also shifts from farming to music and walking without a clear organising point. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main idea, group related examples together, and make references such as “these things” more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “financial issue,” “opportunity,” “experience,” “healthy,” and “positive impact.” These choices show an attempt to discuss both employment and leisure. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are inaccurate, repetitive, or difficult to understand, such as “other job” for leisure activities, “wasting your time,” and “much and more opportunity.” Frequent spelling errors—including “benifit,” “finincinal,” and “oppertuinty”—also make the message harder to read. Build a more precise set of topic words and check spelling carefully. Prefer natural collocations such as “earn a living,” “pursue hobbies,” and “maintain physical and mental well-being.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons, for example, “I think doing job is good because…” and the sentence beginning “When someone doing working…”. This shows an effort to connect ideas, but the range remains limited and complex attempts are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and sentence construction occur throughout: “Some people thoughs that doing work is better” needs a correctly formed reporting verb and clause, while “When someone doing working” lacks a finite verb. Articles, agreement, and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “doing job” and the long sentence about your friend. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then add subordinate clauses, checking verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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