Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

People hold differing views regarding whether work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. While some argue that hobbies and lesiure interst shob be prioritize than their jobs. I belive that long-term benefits inincome make it worthewhile investment.

On the one hand, there are valid arguments for why some views people should more focuse on their personal hobbies and lesiure interest. The main argument is that worker having hobbies , aim and interst makes person eager to something and get them closer to their dream.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes a limited attempt to address the topic: it mentions people who prioritise hobbies and leisure, and the opening suggests a view that income can make work worthwhile. However, the discussion of the work-focused attitude is not developed, the second attitude is only briefly introduced, and no clear, sustained opinion or supporting examples are provided. The sentence about hobbies helping a person move closer to a dream is relevant, but it is not explained. The response contains 77 words, so it is 173 words below the 250-word minimum; 15 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from that count. To improve, discuss both attitudes in separate, developed points, state your own position clearly, and support it with specific reasoning or examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening introduces the topic, and “On the one hand” signals the start of a discussion of hobbies. This gives the reader some indication of direction. However, the response ends after this point, so there is no progression through both attitudes or a conclusion. Connections within sentences are also unclear, particularly in “The main argument is that worker having hobbies, aim and interst makes person eager to something.” The opening contrast beginning with “While” is not completed as a clear, balanced comparison. Develop a full paragraph for each view, use linking phrases to show how ideas relate, and finish with a conclusion that restates your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts topic-related vocabulary, including “hobbies,” “leisure,” “long-term benefits,” “investment,” and “dream.” These choices show some awareness of the subject and allow the general topic to be recognised. However, spelling errors and inaccurate or unnatural word combinations are frequent enough to limit clarity: examples include “lesiure interst,” “worthewhile investment,” and “eager to something.” Some words are repeated, while the range is too narrow to express the two attitudes in detail. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations as complete phrases. For example, “prioritize hobbies” could be expressed as “give priority to leisure activities,” and “long-term benefits in income” as “long-term financial benefits.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to use more than simple statements, including a contrast structure beginning “While some argue…” and a reason clause introduced by “The main argument is that…”. These show an effort to connect ideas. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed, which makes relationships between ideas difficult to follow. The opening phrase “whether work as the most important thing in life” lacks a complete grammatical structure, and “While some argue that…” is left without a main clause. In “worker having hobbies … makes person eager,” the subject and verb pattern is not controlled. Practise writing complete sentences with clear subjects and finite verbs, then check articles, agreement, and punctuation before adding more complex clauses.

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