Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There are two types of mindsets in people. I will define and discuss both one by one , share my opinion on them. I will also discuss their advantages and disadvantages in my perspective.

In first category, there are people who prioritize their work or jobs above anything else. They are very hard working people. They are very passionate about their work. Their sole goal is to develop their career, earn significant amount of money and have big homes. They are the people who want to have cars in their garages. They are the ones who succeed in jobs or businesses. They are very good at what they do. In my perspective they are successful people. But as success comes at great sacrfices so they sacrifice their hobbies, their leisure time, and quality time with their families. They are remember for their work and not as persons. They have a social circle including business partners and not friends. If someone is happy in this type of environment then he is good at his place.

In other category, there comes people who just do jobs to earn enough to survive and live a normal life. They give their most of the time to their families and friends. They spend quality times with them. But they consider job or their work as headache. They just want to escape from it whenver they get a chance. Usually they are not succeeded people in other's eyes but they are genuinely happy in their own eyes. They think life as short and they live it as happily as they want. They are genuinely good people. They want to be remembered as good persons having a lot of memories. They don't earn good, they don't have big houses. They don't have cars. But they have homes. They live with their families.

In my perspective, both these categories have advantages and disadvantages. Both these categories have it own colours. But if you ask me to give my own opinion on them. I would say that we shouldn't select any of these two and we should bring balance to them. You should be hard working and loyal to your work just like first category. You should have earned more money and spend it on poor people. But in the mean time, you shouldn't think job as your only source of happiness. You should spare time for your hobbies, friends and family just like category two.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both attitudes and give a clear personal view: the first group prioritises career, while the second values family and leisure, and your conclusion recommends balance. This covers the main parts of the task. The discussion is relevant, but some ideas are asserted rather than explained. For example, you say work-focused people “succeed in jobs or businesses” and that leisure-focused people are “genuinely happy,” without showing why these outcomes apply or giving a specific example. The contrast between financial success and personal fulfilment is useful, but could be explored more carefully, including the possibility that people can enjoy both work and leisure. Develop fewer claims with reasons or examples to make the argument more convincing and complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, one paragraph for each attitude, and a conclusion stating your preference for balance. The reader can follow the main contrast, and phrases such as “In other category” and “In my perspective” signal shifts between points. However, some linking is mechanical, and repeated sentence openings—“They are…” and “They don’t…”—make the paragraphs feel like lists rather than connected arguments. The introduction also promises advantages and disadvantages, but these are not clearly organised as such. Use clearer links between claims, and refer back to ideas more precisely; for instance, explain how the sacrifices in the first group contrast with the family time valued by the second. This would strengthen progression within paragraphs.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of relevant vocabulary, including “prioritize,” “passionate,” “sacrifice,” “quality time,” and “balance,” which helps communicate the topic and your position. Some choices are imprecise or unnatural, however, such as “successful people” as a broad label, “They are remember for their work,” and “They have their own colours.” Spelling errors such as “sacrfices” and “whenver” also reduce accuracy. Repetition of “people,” “work,” and “good” limits the range, particularly in the descriptions of each group. Aim for more precise collocations and vary repeated terms—for example, distinguish career achievement from financial security, and describe leisure-focused people as prioritising personal fulfilment rather than simply calling them “good.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both short statements and some longer structures, including the contrast introduced by “But as success comes at great sacrifices…” and the conditional “If someone is happy in this type of environment…”. Meaning is generally clear, but some grammatical errors recur. Examples include “They are remember” instead of “They are remembered,” “They give their most of the time” instead of “They give most of their time,” and “Both these categories have it own colours” instead of “their own colours.” There are also issues with articles and sentence construction, as in “In first category,” and the opening sentence lacks a clear grammatical link between “discuss” and “share.” Check agreement, verb forms, and possessives, and combine some short sentences into accurately controlled complex ones.

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