Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in my opinion it is the bestest thing of a person because money is important but also hobbies and leisure interests.

lets discuss it in details, At the satrting with the person who gave importance to only money.

That are those persons who see critical and financial situations in thier childhood, that make a keen interest in them for money . That is a good thing but it is also important to have some activities in thier life.

At continuous, the second form of the person who those gave importance to their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs, these are the public who have dad money . those eho dont have any worry about money only they can gave most imprtance to activities rather than jobs.Which is not a good thing.

A person who gave equal importance to activities and money and jobs too. It is a best form a mature person. Because if you only focus only on money then you will become a dumb and also if you only do focus on activities and not able to do his own future secure. in my opinion the form i described is the bestest form a person who can conqueror the world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both attitudes by discussing people focused on money and people who prioritise hobbies, and you give a view that balancing work, money and leisure is best. However, the position is not clearly established at the start: “in my opinion it is the bestest thing” does not identify what “it” refers to. The explanations are brief and general, such as linking financial hardship in childhood to valuing money, without developing an example or showing why either attitude is beneficial or harmful. The response is also 55 words below the 250-word minimum; eight words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen the response, state your position clearly and extend each main point with a specific example and explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response moves from people who prioritise money, to those who favour leisure, and then to your preferred balance. This gives the reader a basic sense of the discussion. However, the progression is not consistently clear, and paragraphing does not effectively separate the ideas. Phrases such as “lets discuss it in details” and “At continuous” do not guide the reader accurately, while “That are those persons” makes the reference unclear. Several points are joined in long, loosely connected sentences, particularly the final discussion of money, activities and future security. Use a clear introduction, one paragraph for each attitude, and a conclusion; connect ideas with precise references and straightforward linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “financial situations,” “hobbies and leisure interests,” and “importance.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “have dad money” appears to mean that people have enough money, while “conqueror the world” does not clearly express the intended idea of success. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “satrting,” “thier,” and “imprtance,” which reduce clarity. Aim for accurate, natural phrases rather than trying to use emphatic expressions. Building vocabulary around work-life balance, financial security and personal fulfilment would help you express the comparison more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences, including the explanation that childhood financial difficulties can create an interest in money, but control is inconsistent and errors sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. Examples include “That are those persons,” “those who gave importance,” and “if you only do focus on activities,” which show problems with agreement, verb forms and sentence construction. Articles and sentence boundaries are also unreliable, as in “It is a best form a mature person.” Most sentences rely on simple patterns, and attempts to combine several ideas often become faulty. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and verb forms, then build longer sentences using one clear main clause and a correctly formed subordinate clause.

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