Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is often argu, that regarding work is most signifinat things in the life and nothings else matter. Some people believe that most improtant thing in life is ragardin work and and others intrested things is wast of time. However, other consider that having the jobs abouth hobbies and intrested make jobs more interested. From my point of view the best way to make meanful life is to choice the jobs related to hobbies and intrested because hobbies make things more essay and increases productivity.

One major reason why the people should not gives high propirty to work. non-intrested things make peopls care less and they do not enjoy to do work. Most of the people whenever they work on unintersted things they feel lazy, they do not willing to complet that work. So this thing make harder to complet the work. The cear exapmle of this is small firms. Most of the small farms take those project which is dislike by the workere. As result worker do not want to work and this also reduce productive.

I strongly believe that person should choice the work related to their hobbise. The key reasons be

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify both attitudes in the introduction and state a clear preference for work connected to hobbies, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion is only minimally developed: the paragraph about prioritising work mainly explains why people may perform poorly in disliked jobs, rather than explaining why some people regard work as life’s most important focus. Your own view is introduced, but the final paragraph stops at “The key reasons be,” leaving its supporting reasons and conclusion unfinished. The response also contains 194 words, below the required 250, which limits how fully you can address both sides and support your opinion. Develop each attitude with a clear reason and a specific example, then complete your argument and conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an identifiable introduction followed by a paragraph about work that is not enjoyable and a paragraph beginning to present your opinion. This gives the reader a basic sense of the intended structure. However, progression is difficult to follow because the first paragraph shifts between the two views without clearly distinguishing them, and the final paragraph ends abruptly. Connections such as “However” and “As result” are attempted, but the relationship between some ideas is unclear; for example, the reference to “small firms” and “project” does not clearly illustrate the preceding point. Use one paragraph for each attitude, make each example directly support its main idea, and finish with a conclusion. Clearer referencing and transitions would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “productivity,” “hobbies,” “leisure interests,” and “work,” and you try to express ideas such as job satisfaction and motivation. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are frequent enough to strain understanding: examples include “signifinat,” “intrested,” “propirty,” and “hobbise.” Some phrases are also unclear or unnatural, such as “having the jobs abouth hobbies” and “make things more essay.” This limits the precision of your argument and makes it hard to distinguish some ideas. Build accuracy with common topic collocations before reaching for more complex wording; for example, use “prioritise work,” “pursue a hobby,” and “job satisfaction.” Proofread spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make some attempts to combine ideas, including “whenever they work on unintersted things they feel lazy” and “because hobbies make things more essay and increases productivity.” These show an effort to use subordinate clauses and explain cause and effect. However, sentence structures are limited and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur frequently. For instance, “Some people believe that most improtant thing in life is…” is missing an article, while “the people should not gives” has incorrect subject–verb form. The fragment “One major reason why the people should not gives high propirty to work.” is not a complete sentence, and the final “The key reasons be” is unfinished. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add complex clauses and check each sentence for a complete verb and clear punctuation.

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