Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people believe that the most important thing in life is work and a person should have little interest in other things, while others are more enthusiastic towards their hobbies and interests than their jobs. I think that a person should focus more on his livelihood and work but he should give a little time to his hobbies also.

I believe that a person can get success in his life if he focuses more on his goals and work. If a person is giving more time to his leisure interests and is easily getting distracted from his actual work, then he can't achieve much in his life. A person should give a little time of his day to his hobbies to keep his mind relax and fresh, so that he can focus properly on his work, but if a person is giving more time to other activities, then he can't focus completely on his job and will lose interest in his job. For example, if a person is playing a cricket match for 4 to 5 hours daily after work, then while doing his work, he will probably think about the last match he had or the match he is gonna play after. Due to this distraction, he will not be able to do his job correctly and will possibly get fired from his job.

The people opposing this view might think that a person's hobbies are a necessary part of his life and these are the things that keep him relax and alive. I think people should have interests other than everyday's work but giving more time to the hobbies rather than work is not right and will do harm to the person.

In conclusion, people can have leisure interests but they should give a reasonable amount of time to them rather than focusing more on the leisure interests and putting their jobs behind.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you favour prioritising work while allowing time for hobbies, and you address both attitudes. The example of someone playing cricket for several hours helps illustrate how leisure could distract from work. However, the opposing attitude receives only brief treatment: you say hobbies keep people “relax and alive,” but do not explain why some people might reasonably place leisure above employment, such as for wellbeing, relationships, or personal fulfilment. Your own argument also relies heavily on the claim that extensive hobbies harm career performance, without considering circumstances where a hobby can support motivation or balance. Develop both sides more evenly and qualify your claims with a fuller explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction states your view, the main paragraphs develop your reasoning, and the conclusion restates your position. Ideas generally progress logically, and links such as “For example,” “Due to this distraction,” and “In conclusion” help the reader follow the argument. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some stronger control through a relevant example. However, the progression is somewhat repetitive: the idea that too much leisure distracts from work is repeated in several paragraphs, while the opposing view is compressed into one short section. Some references, such as “these are the things,” are broad. Give each paragraph a distinct purpose and use clearer links between the two perspectives.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the topic, including “leisure interests,” “goals,” “distracted,” and “reasonable amount of time.” There are also attempts to express ideas beyond basic statements, such as “focus completely on his job” and “putting their jobs behind.” However, the range is limited by repeated use of “work,” “person,” “hobbies,” and “time,” and several choices are unnatural or imprecise. For example, “enthusiastic towards” is less idiomatic than “enthusiastic about,” while “keep his mind relax and fresh” does not express the intended meaning naturally. Broaden your topic vocabulary and check collocations and word forms so that your meaning sounds more precise and fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex forms, including conditional sentences (“If a person is giving more time…”) and a relative clause (“the match he had”). Most sentences remain understandable, and the longer cricket example shows an attempt to connect cause and consequence. Some grammatical errors persist, however. In “keep his mind relax,” the adjective form is needed; “everyday’s work” has an incorrect possessive construction; and “the match he is gonna play after” has an incomplete time expression. The repeated use of “a person” with “he” also limits variety. Practise accurate verb patterns, possessives, and more varied sentence openings, while proofreading longer sentences for punctuation and structure.

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