Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The interest in work or in hobbies its depends on the individuals choice. sometime it depends on work.

In my perspective , in today's generation some are much more inetrested in making their future much secure by working hard and making money they don't want to risk their future nor to waste their time in hobbies or work that they are not perfect or they don't think that passion don't benfits them. and working in the feild in which that they are not much interested to make money.

On other hand people are making efforts and giving chance and trying to work on their hobbies, but it all depends on their luck as well as their hard work, people more enthusiastic about their hobbies risking their job and are working on their hobbies ,and many are getting successed making fame or becoming influencers and motivating others.

In my perspective in today's generation many people who is following their passion or hobbies are getting successed getting fame and popularity, while some are facing failure and then joining to work or jobs that they are least interested and leaving their passion behind. whereas some people are not even selecting their hobbies beacause of their responsibilies as well as because of their fear of failure.Having families responsibilites on an individuals making them to neglect their hobbies and working for jobs that they are least interest , sometime that jobs are also benefiting them if pay is good.

I know a person whose hobby was dancing ,individual tried for making fame in dancing feild but failed, person left hobby behind and start working science feild and much successed in life. where as other individual was interesed in art and craft and now the person is gained followers on social media for showing DIY crafts.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both attitudes: some people prioritise financial security and work, while others pursue hobbies and may gain recognition. The examples of the dancer who moved into science and the person who built an audience for craft videos help illustrate different outcomes. However, the response only partly fulfils the task because the comparison between the two attitudes is not developed evenly, and your own opinion is not stated clearly or consistently. The repeated phrase “In my perspective” introduces observations, but it does not establish which attitude you believe is preferable or why. Develop a clear position and support it with reasons, such as the value of financial stability alongside the benefits of meaningful leisure.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some paragraphing and a broadly relevant sequence: it introduces the topic, considers work and hobbies, and gives examples. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded into long paragraphs, and the discussion returns repeatedly to success, failure, and responsibility without clearly building an argument. Connectors such as “On other hand,” “whereas,” and “and” are sometimes used inaccurately or mechanically, while references such as “the person” and “other individual” make the examples hard to track. Give each paragraph one clear purpose, use topic sentences, and make the relationship between each example and your main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “future,” “passion,” “responsibilities,” “failure,” and “popularity,” and you attempt phrases such as “more enthusiastic about their hobbies.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “making fame,” “getting successed,” “work science feild,” and “their least interest.” Repetition of “hobbies,” “people,” and “success” also limits precision. Build a more accurate set of expressions for discussing employment and leisure, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise phrasing would help your examples communicate their intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “while,” “because,” and “whose.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “The interest in work or in hobbies its depends” has an incorrect subject structure, while “many people who is following” has an agreement error. The final example beginning “I know a person whose hobby was dancing” also shifts between past and present forms without clear control. Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then combine ideas with accurate subordinate clauses and consistent tense.

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