Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people regrad work as the important thing in life and have little interest in anything else.Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure intersts than their jobs.This essay will discuss both perspective before my own opinion.

On the one hand,now a day all people live important for their work part of live,because work is most important for earning money.While,some people only focuse on their works,because more commitements available their life.For example,financial problem,house rent and child study's are running in their salary,so that people only focus on works.Most people very stress in their life financial problem and hard working daily base,even some time some people over time can do it.Some days people without permission leave cannot taken.As a rusult,correct time their emi ,loan pay for every month and also housing rent.

On the second hand,Some people focus on their hobbies and leisure intersests than their jobs.The main advantage of focuse on hobbies and leisure interst ,physical health and mental health reset and very active their body.Thise people also working is important at same time their physical and mental health also important.People wake up morning some time walking and yoga activitys daily base and after finished work playing game and spend on friends time.They are saturday and sunday planning going outside with family and friends.They not only focuse on works ,both side important for their lifes.As a result,mind relaxed works after playing,the next day without stress start by works.

Some people most important thing in life and have little interst is small amount of disadvantage their life.Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs more advantage is their body health and lifes.In my own opinion people focuse on their hobbies and leisure than their jobs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both attitudes and state your own preference, so the response is relevant to the task. The first body paragraph explains why work matters, using income, rent, loans and children’s education as examples; the next describes the health and social benefits of hobbies and leisure. However, these points are mostly listed rather than explained, and the discussion of the work-focused attitude is not always clear—for example, “more commitments available their life” does not explain how commitments lead people to prioritise work. Your conclusion gives an opinion, but the claim that leisure has “more advantage” is not supported by a clear comparison. Develop each main reason with a fuller explanation or specific example, and make your position more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable structure: an introduction, two paragraphs presenting contrasting attitudes, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the second hand,” and “As a result” show an attempt to guide the reader through the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because several ideas are joined without clear relationships, as in the sequence about financial problems, overtime, leave and loan payments. Some linking expressions are inaccurate or repetitive, and the conclusion repeats the topic rather than drawing the discussion together. Organise each body paragraph around one clear main point, then explain it and give a relevant example; use transitions only where they accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “financial problem,” “physical health,” “mental health,” “hobbies,” and “leisure interests.” This gives the reader a basic sense of the issues being discussed. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “focus,” “important,” and “work.” Frequent spelling errors, such as “regrad,” “intersts,” “commitements,” and “rusult,” also make the writing less clear. Some combinations are unnatural, including “mind relaxed works” and “hard working daily base.” Build a wider set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and collocations carefully; for example, describe work as a source of income and leisure as a way to relieve stress.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a result clause beginning “so that.” However, the range is limited, and attempts to combine ideas often produce faulty sentence structures. For example, “Some people only focuse on their works, because more commitements available their life” lacks a complete, correctly formed clause, while “They are saturday and sunday planning going outside” has an unclear verb pattern. Errors with articles, plurals, agreement, verb forms and punctuation occur throughout, and several sentences require the reader to infer the intended meaning. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Check sentence boundaries and verb forms when editing.

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