Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There is an ongoing debate regarding skilled professionals. A group of individuals believe that doctors and engineers, should be obliged to work in a country where they trained.However, others argue that they should be free to work in any country according to their interests. This essay will discuss both views but i believe professionals should be free to choose.

Examing the latter view, the primary argument the supporters would put forward is that the government invests heavily in subsidised training so professionals should repay that investment by serving their own people. In addition, they also believe that shortage of doctors and engineers directly harms the country, because hospitals and construction projects are left without qualified staff.

On the other hand, those who support freedom of movement argue that professionals should work their skills are most valued. Many developing countries cannot offer fair salaries or modern equipment. For example, a Pakistani doctor working in a well-equipped hospital abroad gains better experience and can send money home to support their family.

In my opinion, professionals should be free to choose because forcing them to stay can reduce their motivation and quality of work. Countries can instead encourage them to return by offering better pay and facilities.

In conclusion, although serving one's own country is valuable, freedom of choice benefits both individuals and society.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.5
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both positions and state your own view clearly: “I believe professionals should be free to choose.” Relevant reasons include public investment in training, shortages of qualified staff, and the possibility of better salaries and equipment abroad. However, the two sides are not developed equally: the case for requiring professionals to serve locally is explained, but the opposing view and your own position receive only brief support. The example of a Pakistani doctor is useful, though its link to gaining experience and helping family could be explained further. The response also contains 221 words, below the required 250, so there is limited space to develop the arguments. Extend each main point with explanation or a specific consequence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each view, and a conclusion that restates your position. Linking expressions such as “In addition,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the discussion. However, the progression within the body paragraphs is quite compressed, and the first transition, “Examing the latter view,” is confusing because it introduces the argument for requiring professionals to stay, not the view presented immediately before it. The conclusion is clear but largely repeats the introduction. Use more precise signposting and develop each paragraph through a claim, explanation, and example so that cohesion feels less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “subsidised training,” “shortage,” “qualified staff,” “well-equipped hospital,” and “freedom of movement.” These choices make the main ideas clear, and the example is expressed in relevant terms. Some wording is imprecise or unnatural, however: “work their skills are most valued” is missing a suitable construction, while “according to their interests” is less precise than language about professional opportunities or personal choice. There are also spelling and capitalization slips, including “Examing” and “Pakistani.” Aim for more accurate collocations and proofread carefully; the suggestions below offer alternatives that fit this topic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including a reason clause in “because forcing them to stay can reduce their motivation” and a sentence explaining the effect of staff shortages. Most meaning remains clear, but some grammatical and punctuation errors are noticeable. In the opening, the comma in “doctors and engineers, should” is unnecessary, and there should be a space after the full stop in “trained.However.” The sentence “professionals should work their skills are most valued” is structurally incomplete; write, for example, “professionals should work where their skills are most valued.” Also capitalize “I” in “i believe.” Check sentence boundaries and clause structure while retaining your attempts at complex sentences.

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