Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Debate on weather indivisuals who persure their career in their country should work in that country or they shoul move out to work in other country. However, i totally agree that they should use their career in other countries due to enough salary and job vacancies.

On one hand, working in same country may encourage unity among the members of of the country and political stability. When professionals such as doctors and engineers work in place where they did thier career it will lower politically the country beacuse people wont complain of others moving outside the country yet they got the knowledge in the country hence fairness in all professions.

On the other hand, doctors and engeneers may prefer to work outside the country because of country economy. Most of professionals move ot the country because the dedicate thier hard work in the country yet they would still get low salary hence decide to move other country to work where they get more salary. Not only the salary but also low job opportunities can cause the maigration of the doctors and engineers to move out side in search of work .For instace, most of the Kenyans graduant are jobless due to lack of their professiopnal vacancy therefore decide to work in other countries with more opportunities to improve their standards of living.

In conclusion, i firmly agree with working outside the country because of more opportunities and good salary payment by doctors and engineers rather than working in a country where you did a career on despite of unity and developing the country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You discuss both positions and make your own view clear: the introduction and conclusion support professionals being free to work abroad. The second body paragraph gives relevant reasons—higher salaries and more job opportunities—and the example of Kenyan graduates helps illustrate the point. The opposing view is also included through the ideas of national unity and political stability. However, that side is less fully explained: the link between professionals staying and political stability is asserted rather than demonstrated, and the fairness point is unclear. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits of retaining trained professionals more precisely, then develop and support both sides to a similar degree.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. The signposts “On one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” make the progression easy to follow. Within paragraphs, however, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, the first body paragraph moves from unity to political stability and then to fairness without explaining how these ideas relate. The sentence beginning “Not only the salary” also has an awkward connection to the preceding point. Use clearer links between each reason and its explanation, and make references such as “they” and “the country” more specific where needed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “political stability,” “job opportunities,” “professionals,” and “standards of living.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, but the range and control are limited by repeated or inaccurate wording. Phrases such as “move other country,” “more salary,” and “professional vacancy” are not natural collocations, while spelling errors such as “indivisuals,” “engeneers,” and “maigration” are noticeable. These issues sometimes make the reader pause to interpret your meaning. Build a bank of accurate topic phrases and check spelling carefully; for example, use “move to another country,” “earn a higher salary,” and “professional positions.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the contrastive opening “While…” idea and the construction “Not only the salary but also…”. However, control is uneven, and errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “working in same country may encourage unity” needs an article, and “most of professionals move” has an incorrect article pattern. The long sentence beginning “When professionals…” is also difficult to parse because its clauses are not clearly organised. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea and a supporting clause, then check articles, subject–verb agreement, and sentence boundaries.

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