Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Professionals are the main part of our society. There is argue that professionals do work where they do training and some people think that giving chance to professionals to choose is right. I have mixed opinion about this statment which i discuss in detail.

On the one hand, i am agree with this point that professionals such as doctor and engineers remain in a country where they do training because they are aware of the environment. Firstly the economy boosted when the professionals invested there where they learn. Furthermore in many developing countries they need to maximize all available resources that required for there. So these countries never loose the talent especially when they invest in it. For example: my cousin went to china to complete the degree of doctor. He never came back because they offer good job to him and offer many facilities so he settled there.

On the other hand, some people believe that it is nessasary that giving chance to professionals is fair. First of all, if professionals have a better opportunity in another country they neglect personal relationships and approach that opportunity because it make huge impact on there career. Moreover, there is no restriction on people to work where they they do training help them to avail the opportunity which is benefit for them.

To conclude, government should take steps to facilities the opportunity for the professionals so that they remain in the country and serve the country. Professionals should be free to work in another country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both views and give a final position: you support professionals staying to serve the country that trained them, while also stating that they should be free to work abroad. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The point that trained professionals understand the local environment is relevant, but the claim that their investment boosts the economy is not clearly explained. The second view is also unclear: the sentence about neglecting personal relationships does not explain why freedom to move is fair, and the next sentence is difficult to follow. Your conclusion presents two positions without resolving the tension between them. The response is 245 words, five words below the 250-word minimum; the eight words copied from the prompt are excluded from the count. Develop each view with clearer reasoning and make your own position consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help readers identify the stages of your discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the first view moves from familiarity with the environment to economic benefits and then to your cousin’s experience without clearly connecting these points. In the second paragraph, the relationship between career opportunities and personal relationships is also hard to follow. Some linking phrases, including “First of all” and “Moreover,” organise sentences mechanically rather than showing their precise logical relationship. Use clearer topic sentences and explain how each example supports the point being made.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “professionals,” “developing countries,” “resources,” and “opportunity.” There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “remain in a country” and “serve the country.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, which sometimes makes the argument difficult to understand. For example, “the economy boosted when the professionals invested there where they learn” does not express the intended relationship naturally, and “facilities” is vague in the example about your cousin. Spelling errors such as “statment,” “nessasary,” and “loose” are noticeable. Build precision by learning common academic collocations and checking spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional clause in “if professionals have a better opportunity in another country” and a relative clause in “where they do training.” This shows some range, but control is inconsistent, and errors occur often enough to make several sentences difficult to interpret. Examples include “There is argue,” “i am agree,” and “it make huge impact,” where verb forms or agreement are incorrect. The sentence beginning “Moreover, there is no restriction…” is especially difficult to parse because its structure is incomplete or confused. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, including lowercase “i” and the use of a colon after “For example.” Practise accurate subject–verb patterns and build complex sentences around one clear main clause.

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