Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There is an ongoing debate about weather some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in their home country where they did their training. While, other believe that they should be free to work in another country. In this essay, I will discuss both view and then give my own opinion.

Those who argue that professionals doctors and engineers are working in their home country because they did their training in this country to serve his nation. They promised to his nation to console his people. Doctors and engineers play an essential role on society and the well-being of country. Doctors treated the patients in the hospitals and recovered the people from the harmful diseases. Furthermore, engineers play vital role in the construction of buildings and home. In contrast, doctors and engineers suffer in the lower income country and they cannot met their household expenses. For example, in different countries like Pakistan, mostly doctors and engineers do not get a job and they do not fulfilled their expenses.

On the other another, some people believe that they should be free to work in another country they want to go, because they are fully independent and proper right to move abroad. In abroad they have better employment opportunities and earn more money to become rich and helping needy people. They have another advantage like they earn money and send back to their home country and in this way they make progress in the world. For example, many professionals worker leave their home country to gain better life style, better education and they represent their country.

In conclusion, both have valid advantage and disadvantages. In their home country, they serve their people and console the patients, while, work in abroad has also advantage they represent their country and work honestly. In my opinion, a balance approach, Government should provide better employment opportunities for professionals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the discussion and give a personal view in the conclusion: professionals can serve their home country, while working abroad may offer better opportunities. The suggestion that governments should provide better employment opportunities is relevant and gives your opinion a practical direction. However, the position is not fully clear or consistently developed. The opening says you will discuss both views, but the first body paragraph shifts between reasons to stay and reasons to leave without clearly explaining how these support the respective views. Claims such as professionals having promised to serve their nation and sending money home need clearer explanation or a specific example. Develop each side more fully and state your position directly before the conclusion. The response contains 285 words, with 34 words copied from the task prompt excluded from that count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and it uses signposts such as “Furthermore,” “For example” and “In conclusion.” These help the reader identify the broad stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first body paragraph moves from serving the nation to low incomes and unemployment without clearly connecting these points, and the second combines personal freedom, earnings, remittances and representing one’s country. Some linking phrases are inaccurate or repetitive, including “On the other another” and repeated uses of “In contrast” and “while.” Improve cohesion by grouping related reasons, using accurate transitions, and making references such as “they” and “this way” clearly point to a specific idea. A clearer sequence of claim, explanation and example would strengthen the overall flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “employment opportunities,” “well-being,” “construction” and “professionals,” and the reader can generally understand the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes meaning awkward: “console his people,” “recovered the people,” “proper right to move abroad” and “better life style” do not express the intended ideas naturally. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “weather” for “whether” and “professionals worker.” Aim for precise, natural phrases rather than repeating general words such as “better” and “country.” Learning collocations for migration, public service and employment would help you express your arguments more clearly and flexibly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a subordinate clause beginning “because” and a contrast structure with “while.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “other believe” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “They promised to his nation” has an unclear subject and incorrect pronoun pattern. Verb forms are also inconsistent in “Doctors treated the patients … and recovered the people,” and “they cannot met” uses the wrong verb form after a modal. Articles, plurals and sentence punctuation also need attention. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea, then add subordinate clauses only when you can control their grammar. Check agreement, verb forms and pronoun references during revision.

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