Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued that should doctor work in the nation where they are being trained which will help nation to have sufficent amount docter or they can work any where according to theri choices for their personal growth.

To begin with, theri are several reason why doctor should work in the place or country were they are trained. It will help the nation to have sufficent amout of doctor. To explain in detalis, if they work in their own country or the nation where he/she gets trained the amount of doctor will be sufficent for the hospitals and paticents and thier will be no death of any body due to shortage of doctors or by not getting proper or approprate checkup. Similarly, the medical or health services will be abit less expensive. To addmore, due the edicutae amount of doctors the paticents who dont get medical expert they should go to other country or call the experts from their for the treatement which cost to high that will be reduce and the paticent can be treated in his own country in less sum of money.

On the other hands, the merits to work any where according to their wills. It will help in theri personal growths. Elaborating on it, any doctor how get paid less and dont have that much chance to prove themself if they gets better place where they can show theri skill and get more salary they are free to go and work any where by theri choice and have personal gorwth or decelopment. For insatance, to be a doctor they have paid very high amount of fee to colleges and if they are not satisfied or cannot fullfill their basic need by the salary and if they get better salary form another country they are very free to go for their finincial development and they will also get chace to learn new environment.

To conclude, although if they work in theri own nation or the place where they are trained it will be more benefical for nation but they have their own rights to work any where by their choice for their personal growth.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both sides of the question and give a clear overall preference: you recognise the national benefit of retaining trained doctors, while concluding that professionals should have the right to choose where they work. The discussion of staffing shortages and access to treatment is relevant, as is the point that overseas work may offer better pay and professional development. However, the two positions are not developed equally: the first side repeats the idea of having a sufficient number of doctors, while the second would benefit from a clearer explanation of how working abroad supports professional growth. The claim that shortages mean there will be “no death” is also too absolute. More specific, balanced examples and a more explicit statement of your own view would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. This makes the overall line of discussion easy to follow, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “On the other hands,” and “To conclude” help identify the stages. However, some linking is mechanical, and ideas within paragraphs are not always clearly connected. For example, the first body paragraph moves from doctor numbers to deaths, then to costs and treatment abroad, with some repetition rather than a clear sequence of supporting points. References such as “they” and “their” can also be unclear. Group each paragraph around one main reason, use more precise referencing, and connect examples directly to the point they support.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “personal growth,” “salary,” “medical or health services,” and “shortage of doctors,” so the main ideas can be understood. There are also attempts to use more formal expressions, such as “financial development” and “appropriate checkup.” However, spelling errors and inaccurate word forms are noticeable throughout, including “sufficent,” “paticents,” “treatement,” and “gorwth.” Some combinations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “the merits to work any where according to their wills” and “the amount of doctor.” These issues sometimes make the reader work to interpret the intended meaning. Build accuracy with topic-specific collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “if they work in their own country” and a relative clause in “a doctor how get paid less.” This shows some range, but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms appear in examples such as “should doctor work,” “any doctor how get paid,” and “if they gets better place.” Some long sentences also join several ideas without clear punctuation, particularly the sentence beginning “To explain in detalis, if they work…”. These problems can make relationships between ideas difficult to follow, although the overall meaning is generally recoverable. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries, and edit complex sentences to ensure each clause is complete.

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