Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is argued that some professionals, such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did traning but other believe that they should be free to work in nay country. This essay will discuss both views.

On the one hand, the doctors and engineers should do work in their own country where they got education and did traning. The countries like Pakistan has huge population so doctors are required to take of healthcare system of country. For example, the residents of Mandi Bahau din are more than 2 millions and when doctors are divided by total number of people, so only one doctor per almost one thousend citizens. In addition, Engingeers are also very high demanding job in pakistan because as the high number of population needs lot of infrastucture, factories and IT warehouses.

On the other hand, All the professionals should be free to work where they wants because whne high skilled people are moved to another countries, they get more better opertunities of job. They can also earn a good amount of moeny which they can not earn in their home country. For Instance, the doctor and engineers have very low income in Pakistan , so whenever they moved to another first world country, they get good amount of money in the form of salary. Furthermore, working in a developed countries are more convenient as comapre to the 3rd world country.

To conclude, working in own country is a great contribution to wellfare of country but when someone need fiancial stabilty and more oppertunitues, they should be free to work in any country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and give a concluding opinion: the first body paragraph argues that trained professionals are needed at home, while the second explains why they may seek work abroad. The examples about healthcare demand and low salaries in Pakistan are relevant, but they are brief and sometimes asserted rather than fully explained. The conclusion recognises both national contribution and personal financial needs, yet it does not make your own preference entirely clear: it says professionals “should be free” when they need stability, but does not explain whether this is your overall position or a qualification. Develop each main reason with clearer explanation and make your stance explicit from the introduction through to the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the population statistic is followed by a sentence about engineers without a clear link explaining how the evidence supports the argument. Some connections are mechanical or awkward, such as “For example” and “Furthermore” introducing points that are not fully developed. Improve the flow by making each paragraph follow a clear sequence—claim, explanation, and example—and use referencing or linking phrases that show precisely how each idea relates to the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “healthcare system,” “infrastructure,” “skilled people,” “opportunities,” and “financial stability.” However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear or natural. Examples include “traning,” “nay country,” “Engingeers,” “infrastucture,” and “oppertunitues.” Some combinations are also awkward, such as “high demanding job,” “good amount of money,” and “working in a developed countries.” Aim to learn accurate spelling and natural collocations as complete phrases, and choose more precise expressions—for example, describe a profession as “in high demand” and refer to “higher salaries” rather than a “good amount of money.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason clause with “because” and a contrast introduced by “but.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “The countries like Pakistan has” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “the professionals should be free to work where they wants” has an agreement error and an unclear pronoun reference. Other patterns, such as “when doctors are divided by total number of people, so only one doctor…” and “working in a developed countries are,” show problems with clause construction, articles, and agreement. Practise building accurate sentences around one main idea, then check verb forms, singular/plural agreement, and sentence boundaries.

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