Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In todays rapidly changing of world many aspects of human life are evolving significantly. some people have wish to go another country to free work other believe that they work in the country where they did training such as doctors and engineers. This essay will examine the two views before giving my opinion.
Firstly, some people think that professionals needs to work in their own country where they did training such as they severed their life for their own country rather then to go abroad. Moreover, nowadays many people move other country for their because Pakistan government not provided jobs. That why Pakistan have not enough workers. If government provides proper jobs they not move to another country then they work for their own country.
Secondly, most people have dream to go abroad for better job and salary because other countries provided many opportunities for worker so that why they go to another country. On the other hand, some move for better experience like other countries has many new technology as compare to the their own country. In my opinion, go another country if they wish and other have worth of workers rather then Pakistan.
To summaries it, most people go abroad to work if they have wish to work on another city and some people believe they should need for work for their own country. But their own country not provided enough salary and jobs so that why they move to another city. And government should need to provide proper facilities like other countries then not move to another country.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The essay addresses both viewpoints and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding why professionals should stay in their home country are repetitive and rely heavily on the specific context of Pakistan, which limits the scope of the discussion. The explanation for why professionals move abroad is also somewhat underdeveloped, lacking depth in exploring the broader global implications. To improve, you should aim to provide more balanced, well-supported arguments that go beyond personal or local observations, ensuring that the discussion remains focused on the general principles of professional migration.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is often hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of clear cohesive devices. While you use transition words like 'Firstly' and 'On the other hand', the connections between sentences are frequently mechanical or unclear. For instance, the transition between the discussion of technology and your personal opinion is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes confusing, such as the use of 'they' and 'their' without clear antecedents. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas precisely. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'severed their life' instead of 'dedicated their lives' and 'worth of workers' which is unclear. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to incorporate less common lexical items effectively. To reach a higher band, focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to employment and migration, and work on using synonyms to avoid repeating words like 'country', 'work', and 'people' throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'professionals needs', 'government not provided'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures (e.g., 'In todays rapidly changing of world'). You rely primarily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring correct verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. Proofreading for common errors like missing 'to be' verbs or incorrect prepositions will also help improve your accuracy.
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