Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
There are few people who believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in their country where they did their training while others think they should be free to work in other country if they wish.
On the one hand, when a person work for their country, they get chance to contribute for their own country. Also, for the development of nation where a country don't have to loose capable and skilled manpower. In addition to this, these professionals are the pillars of nation which help to uplift the life of people. For example, as an International student here in Australia, after I finished my study I will return back with my own country with lots of experience. So, it's not beneficial for Australia because they lose one of the capable and experienced staff their.
On the other hand, people should be provided with freedom to travel any other country where they like. It is because, they got experience which will be helpful after we go back to our own country. For example, people nowadays are going back to their own home country after completing their studies.
In my opinion, I believe, professionals should work in their own country rather than in other country.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you address both sides of the argument and provide a personal opinion, the ideas are underdeveloped. For instance, the argument regarding the 'pillars of the nation' is mentioned but not sufficiently expanded upon with clear reasoning or specific examples. The personal example provided is slightly confusing and does not clearly support the broader argument about professional migration. To improve, you must expand your points with more detailed explanations and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for full development of your position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive start. However, the logical progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by repetitive phrasing and limited use of cohesive devices. While you use transition signals like 'On the one hand' and 'In addition to this', the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'where a country don't have to loose capable and skilled manpower', where the connection to the previous clause is weak. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms and there are some noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'loose' instead of 'lose' and 'return back' (which is redundant). There is little evidence of less common or idiomatic vocabulary. To improve, focus on using more precise academic collocations and synonyms to avoid repetition. For example, instead of repeating 'country' multiple times, use terms like 'nation', 'homeland', or 'domestic workforce'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('a person work', 'a country don't have to') and incorrect preposition usage ('in other country'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure is often repetitive. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate better control over complex sentence forms and reduce the frequency of basic grammatical errors. Proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage (e.g., 'the country' vs 'a country') will be very beneficial.
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