Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Although it is argued that individuals with a doctorate or a degree in advanced fields like engineering should continue working in the country where they studied, others argue that everyone is free to choose their workplace and no one should be restricted. I acknowledge that both perspectives have their own importance, but ultimately, I support the latter argument because I believe this approach is more practical.
Many believe that a person should study and serve their country, but this sentiment is not shared by the majority of successful students. They argue that we have the right to choose our own future, and I support this view. If ambitious individuals are unable to find appropriate opportunities in their own country, they will naturally choose to move abroad in search of better prospects and a supportive environment for personal and professional growth.
On the other hand, people argue that a person should not leave his country, despite the shortage of opportunities. They place an argument that, in developing countries like India, Pakistan and so on, the talent is draining and they are unable to find ambitious, skilled doctors and engineers, due to the mass migration of talented students. So, they argue that they should be in their homeland and serve nation, no matter how hard the circumstances is. He should always stand against the odds and face it with courage. Ultimately, there be a time for them to relish their hard work. In this way, the country might be able to develop an integrated environment for opportunities seekers.
In conclusion, despite the valid arguments placed by my opponents regarding doing employment in own country, I am still convinced that a person should move to abroad for the sake of opportunities, and concerned about its overarching benefits.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and clearly states a position in the introduction and conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. The second paragraph relies heavily on personal opinion rather than exploring the broader implications of the 'brain drain' or the economic benefits of migration. The third paragraph touches on the 'brain drain' in developing nations, which is a strong point, but the explanation is slightly repetitive. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific examples or deeper analysis of the societal impacts of both perspectives, rather than focusing primarily on individual choice versus national duty.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the other hand' and 'In conclusion,' which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are a bit mechanical, and the flow between sentences within paragraphs could be smoother. For instance, the transition from the general argument in the second paragraph to the specific examples in the third could be more refined. The use of referencing is generally clear, though some sentences feel slightly disjointed due to repetitive sentence structures.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your ideas, using terms like 'ambitious,' 'prospects,' 'talent is draining,' and 'overarching benefits.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'doing employment' (should be 'seeking employment' or 'working') and 'opportunities seekers' (should be 'opportunity seekers'). While the vocabulary is adequate for the task, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Expanding your use of topic-specific collocations would significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'no matter how hard the circumstances is' (subject-verb agreement error), 'Ultimately, there be a time' (missing auxiliary verb), and 'move to abroad' (unnecessary preposition). Additionally, the use of pronouns is sometimes inconsistent, such as switching between 'they' and 'he' when referring to professionals. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will help improve this score.
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