Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Initially, Some professionals, such as Doctor and engineers had their training in there home country. I strongly agreed, that they required them to work to there country to help there community and citizens first before helping other country to practice. Two years is enough to rendered and helped them stabilize there career.
Additionally, Most of the professionals they need a career growth that they can get outside the training facilities or country that they are working. Furthermore, A wide range of opportunities they will get in the other country, for example if they are working in America there is a huge career path they can get rather than staying in the asian country.They will get a higher wage salary and accommodation that they cannot have in their home country. While most of the AI technology, robotics and equipment there has an advance technology.
I strongly agree that they are required to stay for two years in the same country that they went there training to improve the skills and strength that they need in there battle to the next country that they want to go.Being a professional is not an easy task and most of the Doctors and nurses left their native country to pursue their American dream or European dream to work and have a stable job and earn for their living.
In conclusion, some professionals had there choice to stay in there training ground or keep going and be free to work in other environment whereas, can give them the proper career growth that they need to accomplished.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention the benefits of staying in the home country (helping the community) and the benefits of moving (career growth and higher wages), the arguments lack depth and specific supporting evidence. The essay is a bit repetitive, particularly regarding the 'two-year' requirement. To improve, ensure each paragraph explores the 'why' and 'how' behind your points more thoroughly, rather than just stating them. The position is consistent, but the overall task response would benefit from more sophisticated reasoning.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Initially' is used incorrectly at the start of the essay, and 'While most of the AI technology...' is a sentence fragment that does not logically connect to the previous point. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the use of 'there' instead of 'their' throughout the text, which disrupts the flow. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'on the other hand') more naturally and accurately.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. There are frequent errors in word choice and form, such as 'rendered and helped them stabilize' (should be 'render service and help them stabilize') and 'wage salary' (redundant). Additionally, there is a persistent confusion between 'there', 'their', and 'they are'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of control over basic vocabulary and the reliance on simple, repetitive phrasing limit the score. Expanding your range to include more academic collocations would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors, such as 'Most of the professionals they need a career growth' (unnecessary pronoun 'they') and 'some professionals had there choice' (incorrect tense). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing commas. The frequency of errors is high enough to cause some difficulty for the reader, although the core message remains understandable. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and the correct use of relative clauses.
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