Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In this part of the essay we discussed about the thought of the other people how they thinking to the other and the community that professional of such doctor and the engineer they work in this country where they complete the training and most of people that they work to free in another country if they wish and my thinking its decision is better to take step to work in another country.
I agree that which the people take a decision to work to the other country because every professional worker see its own advantage because this country gives a professional skills and be able to work. I think that the other countries respected the professional worker and gives the facilities to the professional worker and that this complete the training on this country he better known about this country he take good income and take the facilities to the other country and that i thought this country complete the wishes and take the nationality of this country.
Disadvantage of the professional worker such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in our country and make our country develop to the other country
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 195 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the prompt asks to discuss both views and provide an opinion, the arguments are underdeveloped and repetitive. The essay lacks a clear structure, and the discussion of the opposing view is superficial. The position is stated, but the supporting arguments are fragmented and lack specific examples or logical depth. To improve, you must expand on your points with clear explanations and examples, ensuring you meet the length requirement to allow for a full exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical progression. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively separate the different parts of the task. There is a lack of cohesive devices, making the transition between ideas abrupt and difficult to follow. For example, the shift from discussing the benefits of working abroad to the disadvantages of staying in one's home country is not clearly signaled. The referencing is often unclear, and the overall arrangement of ideas is disjointed. To improve, use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'however', or 'consequently' to connect your sentences and paragraphs logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'work', 'country', and 'professional worker'. There is little attempt to use academic or topic-specific vocabulary related to migration, professional development, or economic impact. Some word choices are inaccurate, such as 'the other people how they thinking to the other', which hinders clarity. To improve, focus on learning collocations related to the topic, such as 'brain drain', 'career advancement', or 'international mobility', and try to vary your word choice to avoid repetition.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement, sentence structure, and article usage (e.g., 'the other people how they thinking', 'this country gives a professional skills'). The sentences are often run-on or fragmented, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. There is a lack of control over basic grammar, and punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering simple sentence structures first, ensuring correct subject-verb agreement and tense usage before attempting more complex, compound-complex sentences.
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